Some parents believe that watching and playing computer games should be limited and substituted by reading books. Do you agree or disagree? v.2
Some parents believe that watching and playing computer games should be limited and substituted by reading books. v. 2
Education is now one of the most controversial issues that people like debating about. Thus, every parents are caring about how to educate their children. It is considered by some parents that parents should prohibit children from playing games in order to study or read books. However, I don' t agree about this opinion.
To begin with, as the game industry have been progressing, numerous games have been appearing increasingly. Therefore, plenty of children are interested in games, and it is true that they spend tons of time to play games. Nevertheless, I believe that parents don' t have to block children from playing games. Because, they can relieve stress by playing games. Furthermore, playing games can help to make a good friendship with friends. In addition, a number of people are working in game company these days, because the industry of game have improved significantly. A lot of professional gamers got popular and famous nowadays. Playing games may be another opportunity for children.
Meanwhile, some parents believe that most games exert a negative influence on children, because they lost their time to study or read books by playing games. Playing games for a long time may generate health problem. For example, there was a person who died cause of playing games for a long time in Korea. For that reason, my parents also prevented me from enjoying games, when i was a kid. Besides, there are a huge amount of violent games that exert a negative effect on children, such as shooting games, battle games.
In conclusion, although it is argued by some parents that parents should prohibit children from playing games, I totally disagree about their opinion. Because, I believe that it is too old-fashion opinion, and game industry are progressing more and more as time goes by. Moreover, if children have a good ability at playing games, it may be good opportunity to become a famous professional gamer. Hence, in my opinion, thinking that playing games is always bad is too old-fashion opinion.
Education is
now
one of the most controversial issues that
people
like debating about.
Thus
, every
parents
are caring about how to educate their
children
. It
is considered
by
some
parents
that
parents
should prohibit
children
from
playing
games
in order to study or read books.
However
, I
don&
#039; t
agree
about this opinion.
To
begin
with, as the game industry have been progressing, numerous
games
have been appearing
increasingly
.
Therefore
,
plenty
of
children
are interested
in
games
, and it is true that they spend tons of
time
to play
games
.
Nevertheless
, I believe that
parents
don&
#039; t
have to
block
children
from
playing
games
.
Because
, they can relieve
stress
by
playing
games
.
Furthermore
,
playing
games
can
help
to
make
a
good
friendship with friends.
In addition
, a number of
people
are working in game
company
these days,
because
the industry of game have
improved
significantly
.
A lot of
professional gamers
got
popular and
famous
nowadays.
Playing
games
may be another opportunity for children.
Meanwhile,
some
parents
believe that most
games
exert a
negative
influence on
children
,
because
they lost their
time
to study or read books by
playing
games
.
Playing
games
for a long
time
may generate health problem.
For example
, there was a person who
died
cause of
playing
games
for a long
time
in Korea. For that reason, my
parents
also
prevented
me from enjoying
games
, when
i
was a kid.
Besides
, there are a huge
amount
of violent
games
that exert a
negative
effect on
children
, such as shooting
games
, battle games.
In conclusion
, although it
is argued
by
some
parents
that
parents
should prohibit
children
from
playing
games
, I
totally
disagree about their
opinion
.
Because
, I believe that it is too
old
-fashion
opinion
, and game industry are progressing more and more
as
time
goes by.
Moreover
, if
children
have a
good
ability at
playing
games
, it may be
good
opportunity to become a
famous
professional gamer.
Hence
, in my
opinion
, thinking that
playing
games
is always
bad
is too
old
-fashion
opinion
.
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