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Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. v. 3
Many people claim that companies employee has to dress nicely where as other believes work quality should be taken into consideration rather than dressing. The following essay will further elaborate both the sides and draw a plausible conclusion. There is no denying that dressing smartly improves the confidence level of an employee. In other words, good clothes/uniform build up a own confidence. For an industry who frequently interact with clients, while presentation or marketing of product an employee looks presentable in front of customers and the smart clothing increases the his confidence as a result he able to deliver nicely in the presentation. Moreover, certain clothes of an organization / formal clothes indicates the status of an organization in the market. Nowadays, smart clothing shows a person's personality, while in the meetings this smart appearance attracts the customer's or the other party's attention and builds the good image their the organization. This help for a company to improve their status in the industries. On the other hand, many people believe that work quality, productivity, creativity of an employee should be valued first. In addition the employee should have the skills and knowledge that will help the company. The employee must have certain level skills as per his designation so it will lead to company growth. Furthermore, no dress restrictions improves the employee relationships to some extent. As level of an employee in an organization can be judged by their certain dressing subsequently it creates partiality among all employees. No restriction for dressing will improve the bond among all people of the company. For instance, a service providing employee interacting with a customer allows customers to feel the employee just as a normal human being as their friend instead of feeling any burden. This builds a bond between organization and customer and consequently customer stays loyal to one company. Thus considering all the points, I believe that creativity should be valued first because of employees knowledge and talent results industries growth and then smart dressing should be second priority to improve the status in the market
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people
claim that
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companies
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employee
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has to
dress
nicely
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where as
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other
believes work quality should
be taken
into consideration
rather
than
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dressing
. The following essay will
further
elaborate both the sides and draw a plausible conclusion.

There is no denying that
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dressing
smartly
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improves
the confidence level of an
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employee
. In
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other
words,
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good
clothes/uniform build up
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a
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own
confidence. For an industry who
frequently
interact with clients, while presentation or marketing of product an
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employee
looks presentable in front of
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customers
and the
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smart
clothing increases
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the his confidence
as a result
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he
able to deliver
nicely
in the presentation.
Moreover
, certain clothes of an
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organization
/ formal clothes indicates the status of an
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organization
in the market. Nowadays,
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smart
clothing
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shows
a person's personality, while in the meetings this
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smart
appearance attracts the customer's or the
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other
party's attention and builds the
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good
image their the
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organization
. This
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help
for a
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company
to
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improve
their status in the industries.

On the
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other
hand,
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many
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people
believe that work quality, productivity, creativity of an
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employee
should
be valued
first
. In
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addition
the
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employee
should have the
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skills
and knowledge that will
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help
the
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company
. The
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employee
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must
have certain level
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skills
as per his designation
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so
it will lead to
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company
growth.
Furthermore
, no dress restrictions
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improves
the
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employee
relationships to
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some
extent.
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As
level of an
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employee
in an
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organization
can
be judged
by their certain
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dressing
subsequently
it creates partiality among all
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employees
. No restriction for
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dressing
will
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improve
the bond among all
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people
of the
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company
.
For instance
, a service providing
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employee
interacting with a
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customer
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allows
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customers
to feel the
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employee
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just
as a normal human being as their friend
instead
of feeling any burden. This builds a bond between
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organization
and
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customer
and
consequently
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customer
stays loyal to one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Thus
considering all the points, I believe that creativity should
be valued
first
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because
of
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employees
knowledge and talent results industries growth and then
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smart
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dressing
should be second priority to
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improve
the status in the market
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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