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Some parent believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both sides. v.1

Some parent believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. v. 1
Learning mathematics at school has become a topic of debate among parents, While some parents believe that teaching mathematics at the school is unnecessary. Other parents believe that it is essential. This essay will discuss the perspective of both sides in depth. There are a number of parents who believe that school should remove the mathematics from academics because it is an unimportant subject. They have reason to believe that, Mathematics is no longer needed as a human skill because it is typically done by computers. For example, there are different type of computer programs like Microsoft Excel, which can solve complex mathematical equations in few seconds. Because of the above reason, parents believe that their children should not learn mathematics at the school. Various parents also think that knowledge of mathematics is important as it clears the fundamentals. It also helps an individual in the various paths of life and also helps to stay sharp and focused. For instance, a person a math might be able to compute numbers easily which will eventually help him in decision making. As per the above, this particular set of parents believes that mathematics has a great impact on one's life. Parents are concerned about their children and they tend to believe in various aspects related to school curriculum and definitely mathematics is an important topic. Various parents are in favour of mathematics are a subject, whereas some think that it is not important. This essay discussed various aspects, why math should be part of school curriculum and why it should not be part of the curriculum.
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that it is essential. This essay will discuss the perspective of both sides in depth.

There are a number of
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parents
who
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believe
that
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school
should remove the
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mathematics
from academics
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because
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parents
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decision making
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believes
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has a great impact on one's life.

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children and
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school
curriculum and definitely
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mathematics
is an
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important
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parents
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. This essay discussed
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curriculum and why it should not be part of the curriculum.
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IELTS essay Some parent believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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