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Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. v. 1
Formal dressing style is encouraged in some companies. However, others believe that quality is above all. In my opinion, both are equally important and this essay will elaborate my reasons. Firstly, Employees are the representative of their organization, thus looks will be the first thing how the organization is perceived by its clients before they acknowledge its work. For example, in a company such as IBM, the staff is required to dress formally because of its client nature. On the other hand, employers like Instagram and Google, do not regulate its dress code because their customer already knows who they are. Hence, smart dress code is more applicable to SMEs (Small Medium Enterprises) who are establishing their image to their prospective customers. Finally, work quality is crucial for all companies, regardless of its dress code. At the end of the day, delivering a good working output creates a better image for the company. Similar to the above example, IBM, Google or Instagram, has already established their quality of work. However, for SMEs, it becomes an important component of its image along with their dress code. To sum up, I agree with the idea of smart dress code, however quality is important as well. Thus, balancing between both ideas is the right way to create a strong corporate image. For some company, it may be advisable to regulate dress code, especially in the sales department, where engineers may not necessary to abide.
Formal dressing style
is encouraged
in
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some
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companies
.
However
, others believe that
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quality
is
above all
. In my opinion, both are
equally
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important
and this essay will elaborate my reasons.

Firstly
, Employees are the representative of their organization,
thus
looks will be the
first
thing how the organization
is perceived
by its clients
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before
they acknowledge its work.
For example
, in a
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company
such as IBM, the staff
is required
to
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dress
formally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its client nature.
On the other hand
, employers like Instagram and Google, do not regulate its
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dress
code
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
their customer already knows who they are.
Hence
, smart
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dress
code is more applicable to SMEs (
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Small
Medium Enterprises) who are establishing their
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image
to their prospective customers.

Finally
, work
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quality
is crucial for all
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companies
, regardless of its
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dress
code. At the
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end
of the day, delivering a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
working output creates a better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
image
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
. Similar to the above example, IBM, Google or Instagram, has already established their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of work.
However
, for SMEs, it becomes an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
component of its
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image
along with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
code.

To sum up, I
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agree
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of smart
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dress
code,
however
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quality
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
as well
.
Thus
, balancing between both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
is the right way to create a strong corporate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
image
. For
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some
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company
, it may be advisable to regulate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
code,
especially
in the sales department, where engineers may not necessary to abide.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
241 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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