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Some organization believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some organization believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance v. 1
Workplace environments have undergone a huge transformation in terms of gender, working style and working requirements. In such places, few organizations advise employers to dress attractively, while some give priority to the productivity. This essay will further discuss on both the arguments and support clean dressing sense giving a valid reason. Few organizations value quality over looks because productivity is their major requirement. In an IT firm, for example, the interview filtering process is purely based on communication and technical skills rather than the dressing sense. Companies appoint people based on skills, for a skilled workforce is the deciding factor for a company's turnover. To elaborate, the ones who are working individually, without much interaction with others, are those whose task achievement is all that matters to the establishments, but not how they look. Since for such businesses profits are vital, quality supersedes appearance for them. In contrast, others, myself included, believe that dressing smartly is essential to keep the working place lively. Schools, for instance, ask teachers and students to turn up smartly for an active teaching-learning experience. If a person is wearing a crisply ironed clothes, his or her self confidence will definitely be more than the one who is not, and with such feeling an individual is always up on toes. Every employee on the work floor will be energized provided they follow the same practice which would certainly create an energetic atmosphere. Appearance is justified for such organisations as it clearly ensures a vibrant workspace. From the above debate, the conclusion can be drawn that based on the type of work organisations tailor rules. A work which involves, no communication with clients give importance to daily working tasks, yet I believe, despite the nature of employment since good attire boosts self-esteem, dressing properly should be recommended.
Workplace environments have undergone a huge transformation in terms of gender,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
style and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
requirements. In such places, few organizations advise employers to dress
attractively
, while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
give priority to the productivity. This essay will
further
discuss on both the arguments and support clean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dressing
sense giving a valid reason.

Few organizations value quality over looks
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
productivity is their major requirement. In an IT firm,
for example
, the interview filtering process is
purely
based on communication and technical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
rather
than the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dressing
sense.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Companies
appoint
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
based on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, for a skilled workforce is the deciding factor for a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
's turnover. To elaborate, the ones who are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
individually
, without much interaction with others, are those whose task achievement is all that matters to the establishments,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not how they look. Since for such businesses profits are vital, quality supersedes appearance for them.

In contrast
, others, myself included, believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dressing
smartly
is essential to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
place lively. Schools,
for instance
, ask teachers and students to turn up
smartly
for an active teaching-learning experience. If a person is wearing a
crisply
ironed clothes,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
his or her
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
self confidence
will definitely be more than the one who is not, and with such feeling an individual is always up on toes. Every employee on the work floor will
be energized
provided they follow the same practice which would
certainly
create an energetic atmosphere. Appearance
is justified
for such
Do not mix variants of the same word ('organisation' and 'organization') within a single text.
organisations
as it
clearly
ensures a vibrant workspace.

From the above debate, the conclusion can
be drawn
that based on the type of work
Do not mix variants of the same word ('organisation' and 'organization') within a single text.
organisations
tailor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
. A work which involves, no communication with clients give importance to daily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
tasks,
yet
I believe, despite the nature of employment since
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
attire boosts self-esteem,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dressing
properly
should
be recommended
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some organization believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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