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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.16

A neat suit, a tie and a shining pair of shoes are the most common wear stuff that we can see employees are always wearing. Some organisations give the appearance of thier employees a massive important, they believe that this will reflect positevely on their customers and cleints and as a result, it is known that many workers get a salary deduction due to neglect their appearance during working hours. In contrast, many national and multinational companies give their stuff theit freedom to wear what they want with some forbedden clothes such as sleepery and coloured t-shirts, so the priority for them is the value quality of work instead of apperance. Smart casual is the new concept in some organisations nowadays. Meanwhile, it is not formal wear which contains suites, classic shoes and ties, also it is not too casual wear so it is moderate, in another word people can wear jeans with a shirt or a suit shirt and a sport footwear. In my point of view, smart casual wear gives the employees more comfort and reflects their real character while allowing them work freely with comfortable clothes, in the other side, formal classic dress became an old-fashioned and don't reflect our fast life, also prevent us to move in a normal way. At the end, it is important to give the main concentration to the quality of work but to wear suitable dress during working hours to reflect a positive feelings on our customer and collegues in work place and office.
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organisations
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employees a massive
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important
, they believe that this will
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reflect
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positevely
on their customers and
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a salary deduction due to neglect their appearance during working hours.

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national and multinational
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companies
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their stuff
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freedom to
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wear
what they want with
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forbedden
clothes such as
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coloured
t-shirts,
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the priority for them is the value quality of
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work
instead
of
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apperance
.

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organisations
nowadays. Meanwhile, it is not formal
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which contains suites, classic shoes and ties,
also
it is not too casual
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wear
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so
it is moderate, in another word
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people
can
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wear
jeans with a shirt or a suit shirt and a sport footwear.

In my point of view, smart casual
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wear
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gives
the employees more comfort and
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reflects
their real character while allowing them
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work
freely
with comfortable clothes, in the other side, formal classic dress became an
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old
-fashioned and don't
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reflect
our
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fast
life,
also
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prevent
us to
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move
in a normal way.

At the
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, it is
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important
to
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give
the main concentration to the quality of
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work
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but
to
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wear
suitable dress during working hours to
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reflect
a
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positive
feelings on our customer and
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collegues
in
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work
place and office.
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IELTS essay Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
253 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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