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Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge experience v.1

Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation 1
It is believed that modern artists are getting paid an abundant price for artefacts they make while pushing other artists who get old with time into struggle to live a comfortable life and nations should involve to curb this situation. I completely agree with the statement about artists and this is because people are habituated to modern things without concentrating on the details that an old art presents with utmost importance. To embark on, in the contemporary world there is no value for intricate artworks. People are fascinated with the things that are made with equipments and technology and lost interest in products made by hand. Earlier artefacts such as clay sculptures were completely structured with hand and if something goes wrong whole thing had to be made from the scratch. But, modern technology has made it possible to do anything easily without the use of complicated tools and also can resume from where they had left. This kind of culture was incorporated in lifestyles of the modern world and diverting them towards new and updated arts. For example, a study in the Europe has revealed that there is a drastic drop in the sale of ancient monuments and raise in the advanced and updated artefacts in the recent years. On the other hand, living a normal life is getting harder for old artists due to lack of support and loss with the products they make. Yes, government should definitely involve in this and support the artists, helping them sell their products by promoting the importance and values of a hand made product and detailing of the artefacts produced with hands. In this way everyone can come forward to purchase these things and stop the struggle of the outdated artists. For instance, in India every artist lives a comfortable life and no one struggle to live their life as the Government pays 50% as gratitude towards old and new artists and help developing the country's heritage and culture. To conclude, maintaining the balance between modern and older arts should be considered as a serious issue and nations should interfere to resolve the problems that artists face so that they do not lose hope and stop making great arts with hands and ancient methods and should pay the same attention as a modern artist gets.
It
is believed
that
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modern
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artists
are getting paid an abundant price for
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artefacts
they
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make
while pushing other
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artists
who
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get
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old
with time into struggle to
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live
a comfortable
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life
and nations should involve to curb this situation. I completely
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agree
with the statement about
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artists
and this is
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because
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people
are habituated
to
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modern
things without concentrating on the
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details
that an
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old
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art
presents with utmost importance.

To embark on, in the contemporary world there is no value for intricate artworks.
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People
are fascinated
with the things that
are made
with equipments and technology and lost interest in
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products
made by
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hand
. Earlier
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artefacts
such as clay sculptures were completely structured with
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hand
and if something goes
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wrong
whole thing had to
be made
from the scratch.
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But
,
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modern
technology has made it possible to do anything
easily
without the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of complicated tools and
also
can resume from where they had
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left
. This kind of culture
was incorporated
in lifestyles of the
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modern
world and diverting them towards new and updated
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arts
.
For example
, a study in the Europe has revealed that there is a drastic drop in the sale of ancient monuments and raise in the advanced and updated
Possible spelling mistake. 'artefacts' is British English.
artefacts
in the recent years.

On the other
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hand
, living a normal
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life
is getting harder for
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old
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artists
due to lack of support and loss with the
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products
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
. Yes,
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government
should definitely involve in this and support the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
artists
, helping them sell their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
by promoting the importance and values of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hand
made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
and detailing of the
Possible spelling mistake. 'artefacts' is British English.
artefacts
produced with
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hands
. In this way everyone can
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come
forward to
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purchase
these things and
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stop
the struggle of the outdated
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artists
.
For instance
, in India every
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artist
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
a comfortable
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life
and no one struggle to
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live
their
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life
as the
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Government
pays 50% as gratitude towards
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old
and new
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artists
and
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help
The verb 'help' is used with an infinitive: "to develop" or "develop".
developing
the country's heritage and culture.

To conclude
, maintaining the balance between
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modern
and older
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arts
should
be considered
as a serious issue and nations should interfere to resolve the problems that
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artists
face
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so
that they do not lose hope and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
making great
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arts
with
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hands
and ancient methods and should pay the same attention as a
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modern
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artist
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gets
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
384 words
7.5
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