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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v.18

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 18
In the modern world, the number of private cars is increasing. In this regard, it is true that now transporting goods and getting a final destination are getting harder for car drivers. I completely agree with this statement, however, there are many ways to solve this problem. There is no denying that the main cause of this problem is affordable types of vehicle that can be used by city dwellers without any struggles. In others words, the world of vehicles is advanced and reduced in price. Consequently, many individuals have owned a auto. A good illustration of this is big cities, where every family has at least one automobile. Moreover, there is a wide range of vehicles, which can be used for transportation, such as bicycles, motor bicycles and trucks. There are making the situation even worse. For example, if private car owners share their machine with someone, the traffic jam can be reduced. On the other hand, the government regulation can alleviate this situation. It is clear that if the authorities, tax drivers heavily, they will use public transports, such as buses and underground. To illustrate, in New Zeland, having a private auto is costly. As a result, many town dwellers prefer to use public transports. Furthermore, the authorities can prohibit to import foreign transports in their country. It will motivate domestic business and reduce traffic jam. For example, German is widely known because of its strict policy to imported transports. As a result, they are producing their brands, such as Mercedes and Audi. To conclude, although traffic jam is a major issue for the authorities, it can be solved by collective measures, which are taken by the government, such as introducing extra taxes for the drivers and prohibiting to import vehicles from abroad.
In the modern world, the number of private cars is increasing. In this regard, it is true that
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now
transporting
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goods
and getting a final destination are getting harder for car drivers. I completely
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agree
with this statement,
however
, there are
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many
ways to solve this problem.

There is no denying that the main cause of this problem is affordable types of
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vehicle
that can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by city dwellers without any struggles. In others words, the world of
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vehicles
is advanced
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
in price.
Consequently
,
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many
individuals have
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owned
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a
auto. A
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good
illustration of this is
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big
cities, where every family has at least one automobile.
Moreover
, there is a wide range of
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vehicles
, which can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for transportation, such as bicycles, motor bicycles and trucks. There are making the situation even worse.
For example
, if private car owners share their machine with someone, the traffic jam can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
.

On the other hand
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
regulation can alleviate this situation. It is
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clear
that if the authorities, tax drivers
heavily
, they will
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use
public
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transports
, such as buses and underground. To illustrate, in New
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Zeland
, having a private auto is costly.
As a result
,
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many
town dwellers prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transports
.
Furthermore
, the authorities can prohibit to import foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transports
in their country. It will motivate domestic business and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
traffic jam.
For example
, German is
widely
known
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its strict policy to imported
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transports
.
As a result
, they are producing their brands, such as Mercedes and Audi.

To conclude
, although traffic jam is a major issue for the authorities, it can
be solved
by collective measures, which
are taken
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, such as introducing extra taxes for the drivers and prohibiting to import
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
from abroad.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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