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Some high school teachers (teachers of students ages 14-18) spend most of class time lecturing (speaking) while the students listen and take notes. Other high school teachers spend most of class time on discussion and projects that students are highly inv v.2

Some high school teachers (teachers of students ages 14-18) spend most of class time lecturing (speaking) while the students listen and take notes. Other high school teachers spend most of class time on discussion and projects that students are highly inv v. 2
Although many prefer classes where teachers lecturing whole the class and students just listen and takes note, I on there other hand prefer discussion classes where students involved in and share their ideas. I will address the most discernible reasons why I fell this way in the following. To begin with, sharing idea and lecturing need some prerequisite, which means students need some preparation and spend some time to read about the topic before the class. this mean they have an idea about the class which they will attended, thus they learn more efficiently. In contrast, when students addend classes with absent of mind, teacher spend most of the class time to explain about the topic. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was university student, almost all my classes my professors lectured and students took note from what they said. I recall that at the beggining of the class all professor spend a lot of classes time to explain the base of the courses and gave students basic idea about the class. But some professor of mine used discussion method, and because of that students read about the topic before the class from many different sources such as their books or internet. The result was amazing because professor immedietly after class began stared to talk about the topic and used other students idea. Moreover, when students exchange their idea in the classes, it is them to prevent missunderstanding. Not only that, but when pupiles involved in discussion they address their problem in discussion and they do not need asked their teacher. Which means teacher have more time to dedicate it to teaching instead of answer students questions. For instance. My high school teacher used this method and may students found their problems answer in other students oppinion. In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe high school teachers most spend their whole time on discussion and encourage students to exchange their idea because students attend class with idea about the class, and because it help to prevent missunderstanding and they address their problem more efficiontly.
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listen and takes note, I on there other hand prefer
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discussion
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involved in and share their
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. I will address the most discernible reasons why I fell this way in the following.

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prerequisite, which means
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need
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preparation and
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spend
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which they will
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addend
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with absent of mind,
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most of the
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experience is a compelling example of this. When I was university
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, almost all my
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lectured and
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took note from what they said. I recall that at the
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beggining
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the base of the courses and gave
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basic
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method, and
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read about the
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sources such as their books or internet. The result was amazing
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after
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exchange their
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, it is them to
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discussion and
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questions.
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this method and may
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found their problems answer in other
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In conclusion
, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I
firmly
believe high school
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missunderstanding and
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IELTS essay Some high school teachers (teachers of students ages 14-18) spend most of class time lecturing (speaking) while the students listen and take notes. Other high school teachers spend most of class time on discussion and projects that students are highly inv v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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