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Some high school teachers (teachers of students ages 14-18) spend most of class time lecturing (speaking) while the students listen and take notes. Other high school teachers spend most of class time on discussion and projects that students are highly inv v.1

Some high school teachers (teachers of students ages 14-18) spend most of class time lecturing (speaking) while the students listen and take notes. Other high school teachers spend most of class time on discussion and projects that students are highly inv v. 1
Nowadays, it is common for people to pursue more than one career at the same time or to switch their line of work frequently. Furthermore, people of all ages are enrolled in various regular and online courses to acquire new skills and qualifications. In my opinion, growing ambition and availability of new and exciting opportunities are the factors that encourage this trend. People want to achieve more and more. They are not content with what they have. For most people, pursuing more than one carrier is the only way to achieve their ambitions in life. So, doctors are working as lecturers at various institutes in their spare time. IT and management professionals are dedicating their weekends for building their own startups. Secondly, everybody is exploring all possible ways of finding an extra source of income, to cater the needs of these zealous job hoppers both online and offline skill development courses are available. Soaring competition also encourages many adults to seek excellence in more than one area. Job security is no longer available in many sectors. People may lose their job anytime and to protect themselves against such catastrophic scenarios, they are working two or three jobs. For example, layoffs in multinational companies have become very common these days. No one wants to take chances with their financial security and stability. The availability of more opportunities also motivates many enthusiasts to adopt multiple careers. Thanks to the advent of the internet and telecommuting, people now have the option of working from anywhere. This enables them to freelance without quitting their full time job. In conclusion, ambition and the lack of job security are the factors that drive people to pursue multiple careers. The availability of new opportunities just made this easier for them.
Nowadays, it is common for
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people
to pursue more than one career at the same time or to switch their line of work
frequently
.
Furthermore
,
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people
of all ages
are enrolled
in various regular and online courses to acquire new
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skills
and qualifications. In my opinion, growing ambition and availability of new and exciting opportunities are the factors that encourage this trend.

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People
want to achieve more and more. They are not content with what they have. For most
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people
, pursuing more than one carrier is the
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only
way to achieve their ambitions in life.
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So
, doctors are working as lecturers at various institutes in their spare time. IT and management professionals are dedicating their weekends for building their
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own
startups.
Secondly
, everybody is exploring all possible ways of finding an extra source of income, to cater the needs of these zealous
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job
hoppers both online and offline
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
development courses are available.

Soaring competition
also
encourages
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many
adults to seek excellence in more than one area.
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Job
security is no longer available in
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many
sectors.
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People
may lose their
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job
anytime and to protect themselves against such catastrophic scenarios, they are working two or three
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jobs
.
For example
, layoffs in multinational
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companies
have become
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very
common these days. No one wants to take chances with their financial security and stability.

The availability of more opportunities
also
motivates
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many
enthusiasts to adopt multiple careers. Thanks to the advent of the internet and telecommuting,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
have the option of working from anywhere. This enables them to freelance without quitting their full time job.

In conclusion
, ambition and the lack of
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job
security are the factors that drive
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people
to pursue multiple careers. The availability of new opportunities
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just
made this easier for them.
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IELTS essay Some high school teachers (teachers of students ages 14-18) spend most of class time lecturing (speaking) while the students listen and take notes. Other high school teachers spend most of class time on discussion and projects that students are highly inv v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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