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High school teachers (teachers of age 14-18) spend most of the class time lecturing while the students listen and take note. Other high school teachers spend mmost of the class time on discussion and projects that students are highly involed in and exchan v.1

High school teachers (teachers of age 14-18) spend most of the class time lecturing while the students listen and take note. Other high school teachers spend mmost of the class time on discussion and projects that students are highly involed in and exchan v. 1
It is often thought that a lot of people are struggling with finding the right balance between their employment and private life. In my point of view, I believe that it is more difficult, because of the busy schedule these days. In the next paragraphs, I will discuss the reason of this issue and what people can do to decrease it in the future life. First of all, the main cause can be the huge amount of responsibilities. This is because employers are providing more tasks on the employee to make the business run well. On top of that, parents these days are more concerned about their children's education. For example, a lot of the mothers and fathers are bringing their youngsters to tuition and other activities, with the thought to give them the right upbringing. All in all, this can rise the amount of duties in a person's life. Secondly, the solution to this issue is the right timetable. This is because to organise the tasks and be aware of the situation. For instance, this can help by not overloading yourself with extra responsibilities during the day. All in all, the day will be more predictable and less stressful. To summarize, a huge amount of inhabitant believes it's demanding to balance the work and personal life. Therefore, it is clear that there is a huge number of tasks that need to be performed during a day. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is significant to tackle this impact by finding the right schedule by providing yourself some spare time. In my opinion, I believe that the main cause can be the high demand in responsibilities.
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a lot of
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people
are struggling with finding the
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right
balance between their employment and private life. In my point of view, I believe that it is more difficult,
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because
of the busy schedule these days. In the
next
paragraphs, I will discuss the reason of this issue and what
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people
can do to decrease it in the future life.

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First of all
, the main cause can be the huge amount of responsibilities. This is
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because
employers are providing more tasks on the employee to
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make
the business run well.
On top of that
, parents these days are more concerned about their children's education.
For example
,
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a lot of
the mothers and fathers are bringing their youngsters to tuition and other activities, with the
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thought
to give them the
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right
upbringing. All in all, this can rise the amount of duties in a person's life.

Secondly
, the solution to this issue is the
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right
timetable. This is
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because
to
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organise
the tasks and be aware of the situation.
For instance
, this can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
by not overloading yourself with extra responsibilities during the day. All in all, the day will be more predictable and less stressful.

To summarize
, a huge amount of inhabitant believes
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it's
demanding to balance the work and personal life.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
that there is a huge number of tasks that need to
be performed
during a day. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is significant to tackle this impact by finding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
right
schedule by providing yourself
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
spare time. In my opinion, I believe that the main cause can be the high demand in responsibilities.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay High school teachers (teachers of age 14-18) spend most of the class time lecturing while the students listen and take note. Other high school teachers spend mmost of the class time on discussion and projects that students are highly involed in and exchan v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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