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Some governments say how many children a family can hare in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometime necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. Do you agree or disagree. v.2

Some governments say how many children a family can hare in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometime necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. v. 2
Supernumerary has been always baleful. Some nation government indirectly controls the population, for the effective management of the populace by imposing heavy taxes on second and third child. It is the effective technique to control the birth rate. In my opinion, I agree with the action of regulating inhabitants by augmenting duties, as it is essential for the proper functioning of a nation. Firstly over-population is cumbersome to manage by any management. Rise in the number of people gradually gives dearth to numerous facilities that could be provided resourcefully in a scarcely populated realm. It lacks the quality of services as it is tough to accomplish each and everyone’s necessity. Also it becomes tough for a person to feed his family with more members. For instance, India is a densely colonized and a chaotic country. It is burdensome to surmount their inhabitants with appropriate medical, education and employment services. On the other hand government taking active part in monitoring haring of a family indirectly through taxes, perhaps succours in providing a quality of life to their people. Moreover it is beneficial for the environment too, as it utilises less resources thereby balancing the ecosystem. For example, Canada, Switzerland is some of the countries who have fewer residents and heavy tax structure that afford free medicine and education to their natives. Recapitulating the fact, we have seen it is essential for the governing body to control their masses for their own benefits, and with the indirect method of imposing taxes, it does not hurt the sentiments of any individual, hence I conclude that it is indispensable for an administration to carry out such a law.
Supernumerary has been always baleful.
Some
nation
government
indirectly
controls the population, for the effective management of the populace by imposing heavy
taxes
on second and third child. It is the effective technique to control the birth rate. In my opinion, I
agree
with the action of regulating inhabitants by augmenting duties, as it is essential for the proper functioning of a nation.

Firstly
over-population is cumbersome to manage by any management. Rise in the number of
people
gradually
gives dearth to numerous facilities that could
be provided
resourcefully
in a
scarcely
populated realm. It lacks the quality of services as it is tough to accomplish each and
everyone
’s necessity.
Also
it becomes tough for a person to feed his family with more members.
For instance
, India is a
densely
colonized and a chaotic country. It is burdensome to surmount their inhabitants with appropriate medical, education and employment services.

On the other hand
government
taking active part in monitoring haring of a family
indirectly
through
taxes
, perhaps
succours
in providing a quality of life to their
people
.
Moreover
it is beneficial for the environment too, as it
utilises
less resources thereby balancing the ecosystem.
For example
, Canada, Switzerland is
some of the
countries who have fewer residents and heavy
tax
structure that afford free medicine and education to their natives.

Recapitulating the fact, we have
seen
it is essential for the governing body to control their masses for their
own
benefits, and with the indirect method of imposing
taxes
, it does not hurt the sentiments of any individual,
hence
I conclude that it is indispensable for an administration to carry out such a law.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some governments say how many children a family can hare in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometime necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
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