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Some experts belive that it is better for children to begin learning a foriegn language at primary school rather than secondary school? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disaddvantage? v.1

Some experts belive that it is better for children to begin learning a foriegn language at primary school rather than secondary school? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disaddvantage? v. 1
Language is necessary for communication, thus learning languages at an early youth is beneficial to their future. Some people believe it is good, whereas some argue that it is not essential at this stage. This essay will discuss both views. Children are fast learners, and they always have the curiosity to learn new things around them. One of the advantages of learning a foreign language is it helps people to communicate with other countries. For example, in India, at the age of 4, children learn English, thus they become capable of handling it when they are teenagers. Another benefit to be bilingual is to take an accurate decision. For instance, while in a conversation a person who know more than one language can easily understand the facts of the talk and can come to a conclusion quickly. While children learn quickly with little effort and can achieve great heights. However, some people believe that studying more languages in the primary class results in more stress for students. To illustrate, some parents think this is the time to play, spend more time playing rather than studying. Moreover, putting them in pressure might harm them mentally. But these concerns of the parents can easily be solved by adapting the latest training techniques like learning through fun. To conclude, people around the globe have a different perspective towards the study of foreign language in primary school, but the advantages clearly show that teaching foreign languages at an early age always useful in their life. Though, the concerns raised by parents can easily be solved.
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argue that it is not essential at this stage. This essay will discuss both views.

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fast
learners, and they always have the curiosity to learn new things around them. One of the advantages of learning a foreign
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language
is it
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helps
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people
to communicate with other countries.
For example
, in India, at the age of 4, children learn English,
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teenagers
. Another benefit to be bilingual is to take an accurate decision.
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. While children learn
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effort and can achieve great heights.

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believe that studying more
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languages
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results in more
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perspective towards the study of foreign
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language
in primary school,
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IELTS essay Some experts belive that it is better for children to begin learning a foriegn language at primary school rather than secondary school? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disaddvantage? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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