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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.6

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 6
It is undeniable that language is a learned activity and people often willing to learn a new language in their life span. Therefore, some people believe that it is worthwhile for children to start learning a foreign language during their primary schooling time, instead of secondary stage. Although, this trend has both positive and negative outcomes, but, the advantages are immense as compared to its drawbacks. To begin with, there are piles of benefits if the school curriculum will include the study of foreign language at the initial stage. Because at the age of 6 to 12 children could easily develop their cognitive ability and at this time their grasping power is much higher than any other stage of life so they will be able to start understanding the basics of a new language and try to use that particular language. Moreover, learning a new language means our brain has to cope with the complexity and this will ultimately enable the children to develop their intellectual intelligence in the beginning years. Indeed, there have been some recorded instances of children in India, who have started learning French at their primary school and becomes extremely fluent when they were in the high school. Thus, it is an absolute imperative to indulge the children with the habit of learning a language of different nationalities. Conversely, the vast majority of people are against the teaching of foreign language in the primary years of their schooling. This group of people believes that school syllabus is already overloaded with heaps of different subject and meanwhile introducing one more language in the primary stage might be a strain on the students and they may feel pressurized because getting mastery in a new language is a difficult task. In addition, some children do not feel confident to be bilingual at the early stage and putting efforts in these would be worthless. For example, according to the survey of Hindustan Times, 60% of children considered themselves the unsuccessful in learning a British language due to lack of time in their former school days. Overall, these few instances make it clear hectic study schedule hinders the learners to be familiar with the new language activity. In conclusion, bilingual people have more opportunities as compared to monolingual that is why schools are putting more emphasis on teaching languages in the primary schools. Even though it has some negative consequences for the students, but the pile of the advantages of this trend could not be ignored, in fact, the benefits are quite considerable.
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people
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in their life span.
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people
believe that it is worthwhile for
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learning
a foreign
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language
during their
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primary
schooling
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instead
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. Although, this trend has both
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outcomes,
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, the advantages are immense as compared to its drawbacks.

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with, there are piles of benefits if the
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curriculum will include the study of foreign
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language
at the initial
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stage
.
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at the age of 6 to 12
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children
could
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develop their cognitive ability and at this
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their grasping power is much higher than any other
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stage
of life
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they will be able to
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start
understanding the basics of a
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language
and try to
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that particular
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language
.
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,
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learning
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language
means our brain
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has to
cope with the complexity and this will
ultimately
enable the
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children
to develop their intellectual intelligence in the beginning years.
Indeed
, there have been
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some
recorded instances of
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children
in India, who have
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started
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learning
French at their
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primary
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school
and becomes
extremely
fluent when they were in the high
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school
.
Thus
, it is an absolute imperative to indulge the
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children
with the habit of
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learning
a
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language
of
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different
nationalities.

Conversely
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people
are against the teaching of foreign
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language
in the
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primary
years of their schooling. This group of
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people
believes that
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school
syllabus is already overloaded with heaps of
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different
subject and meanwhile introducing one more
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language
in the
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primary
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stage
might be a strain on the
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students and
they may feel pressurized
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getting mastery in a
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language
is a difficult task.
In addition
,
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some
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do not feel confident to be bilingual at the early
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stage
and putting efforts in these would be worthless.
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, 60% of
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children
considered themselves the unsuccessful in
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learning
a British
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language
due to lack of
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in their former
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hectic study schedule hinders the learners to be familiar with the
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new
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activity.

In conclusion
, bilingual
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people
have more opportunities as compared to monolingual
that is
why
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schools
are putting more emphasis on teaching
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languages
in the
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primary
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schools
.
Even though
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negative
consequences for the students,
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the pile of the advantages of this trend could not be
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ignored
, in fact, the benefits are quite considerable.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
422 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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