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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school Do the advantages of this outweighs its disadvantages v.51

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school Do the advantages of this outweighs its disadvantages v. 51
Ability of understanding a foreign language is one of the essential capabilities that anyone should have to prosper in the different facets of life. There is a controversial issue between linguists and education system experts about when is the most beneficial age to start learning another language besides their mother tongue one. Accordingly, governments and schools are in a dilemma whether provide a foreign language course for primary schools or not. I firmly believe that youngsters ought to start learning English at the primary schools. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework. First and foremost, the earlier someone begins learning a second language, the more his mind is prepared to bear it. Preteen-agers involve in fewer problems in their life. Therefore their mind is free enough to grasp new information including a new language. Furthermore, long-term studying and exercising assist them to have more confidence in the new language speaking. Last year, I attended a colloquium which was held by English education department. Within the scope of discussions, a university lecturer bore down the correlation between starting age of learning English and confidence of speaking in the public. By showing some relevant statistics which revealed that eighty percent of the people who started their learning earlier, they are more confident to speak publicly. Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance on this subject is that since students of secondary school engage with tougher lessons, they have less time to devote to a second language. Students in the secondary school are busy by the burden of science courses like mathematics, physics and chemistry. As a result, if schools start the second language at age of fifteen, the students would not take it seriously and allocate less time to study it. For example, I live in Iran and because of our supreme leader; schools are obliged to start English as a second language for primary students. As a consequence, a majority of Iranian' s population are unable to understand English and it becomes one of the main problems of Iran for tourist attraction. In a nutshell, I believe that schools should have a plan to embark on teaching a second language to. the primary student.
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facets of life. There is a controversial issue between linguists and education system experts about when is the most beneficial age to
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start
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learning
another
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language
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governments
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are in a dilemma whether provide a foreign
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language
course for
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primary
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schools
or not. I
firmly
believe that youngsters ought to
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start
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learning
English at the
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primary
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schools
. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward
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cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework.

First
and foremost, the earlier someone
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begins
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a second
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, the more his mind
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enough
to grasp new information including a new
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language
.
Furthermore
, long-term studying and exercising assist them to have more confidence in the new
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language
speaking. Last year, I attended a colloquium which
was held
by English education department. Within the scope of discussions, a university lecturer bore down the correlation between starting age of
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learning
English and confidence of speaking in the public. By showing
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relevant statistics which revealed that eighty percent of the
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people
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started
their
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earlier, they are more confident to speak
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.

Another
equally
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students
of secondary
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school
engage with tougher lessons, they have less time to devote to a second
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language
.
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in the secondary
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are busy by the burden of science courses like mathematics, physics and chemistry.
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schools
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start
the second
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language
at age of fifteen, the
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would not take it
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because
of our supreme leader;
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English as a second
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In a nutshell, I believe that
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should have a plan to embark on teaching a second
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to. the
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primary
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.
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IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school Do the advantages of this outweighs its disadvantages v. 51

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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