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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.3

It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. v. 3
It is certainly true that, most of the people nowadays are looking forward to settle down in the urban area. It is often argued that, it is the positive development, whilst other disagree and think that choices of living in the rural area is more favorable to every family in regards to avoid the complexity and crowd-ness of city life. This essay agrees that, living in a town would have maximum opportunity to work along with getting access to the more comprehensive health facilities. With regards to the positive concern, the idea of living in the modern area like city, town; people get maximum opportunity to work in multinational companies and make their family strong in financial concern. Moreover, in city area maximum of the modern business along with big enterprises are established where people with less experience and education simply get opportunity to work there and provide maximum happiness to their family. It is therefore agreed that, people’s preference to be settled in city area leads to increase family income standard and keep up with adequate health facility to maintain healthy family functioning. For example, this is most evident in my country that, family living in a urban area are much more happy with all the resources available than the people of rural area. However, many disagree and feel that, rural lifestyle is simple and people are marginally satisfied with all the available resources to shape their future goal. Similarly, with a bit higher struggle, people from village area can also experience multiple facilities related to health, education, entertainment and the like. Despite this, urban life allows individual with more advance opportunity to fulfill their economic and other objective in quite shorter period is still the best way to reduce the time consuming service of rural lifestyle and this essay clearly disagree on the view of happiness of residing in rural area. For instance, a recent study of 2019 conducted by the department of urban department, Nepal found that 90% of the people residing city area are satisfied with the urban facility and opportunity in comparison to living in rural area. In conclusion, while people preferences of living in city area allow them with more reliable facility in multiple sectors, some people still believe that following the rural life also leads to the advancement of living condition. However, I personally think that, residing urban area would have more opportunity to make their family life more resourceful to fulfill the family needs.
It is
certainly
true that, most of the
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people
nowadays are looking forward
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to settle
down in the
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urban
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area
. It is
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often
argued that, it is the
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positive
development, whilst other disagree and
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think
that choices of
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living
in the
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rural
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area
is more favorable to every
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family
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in regards to
avoid the complexity and
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crowd-ness
of city
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life
. This essay
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agrees
that,
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living
in a town would have maximum
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opportunity
to work along with getting access to the more comprehensive health facilities.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
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the
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positive
concern, the
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idea
of
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living
in the modern
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area
like city, town;
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people
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get
maximum
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opportunity
to work in multinational
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companies
and
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make
their
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family
strong in financial concern.
Moreover
, in city
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area
maximum of the modern business along with
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big
enterprises
are established
where
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people
with less experience and education
simply
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get
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opportunity
to work there and provide maximum happiness to their
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family
. It is
therefore
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agreed
that,
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people’s
preference to
be settled
in city
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area
leads to increase
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family
income standard and
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keep
up with adequate health facility to maintain healthy
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family
functioning.
For example
, this is most evident in my country that,
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family
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living
in
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a
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urban
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area
are much more happy with all the resources available than the
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people
of
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rural
area.

However
,
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many
disagree and feel that,
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rural
lifestyle is simple and
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people
are
marginally
satisfied with all the available resources to shape their future goal.
Similarly
, with a bit higher struggle,
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people
from village
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area
can
also
experience multiple facilities related to health, education, entertainment and the like. Despite this,
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urban
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life
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allows
individual with more advance
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opportunity
to fulfill their economic and other objective in quite shorter period is
still
the best way to
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reduce
the
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time consuming
service of
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rural
lifestyle and this essay
clearly
disagree on the view of happiness of residing in
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rural
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area
.
For instance
, a recent study of 2019 conducted by the department of
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urban
department, Nepal found that 90% of the
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people
residing city
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area
are satisfied
with the
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urban
facility and
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opportunity
in comparison
to
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living
in
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rural
area.

In conclusion
, while
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people
preferences of
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living
in city
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area
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allow
them with more reliable facility in multiple sectors,
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some
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people
still
believe that following the
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rural
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life
also
leads to the advancement of
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living
condition.
However
, I
personally
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think
that, residing
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urban
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area
would have more
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opportunity
to
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make
their
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family
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life
more resourceful to fulfill the
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family
needs.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
412 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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