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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v.48

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v. 48
It is true that foreign languages should be taught at the primary school level for the betterment of children. I strongly believe that it has more advantages than the disadvantages. There are several advantages of studying a foreign language from primary level. First and foremost, during this period, children are more flexible and they can grasp any language very easily. But, if they try to learn in their secondary level, they cannot follow rules and regulations of other languages easily due to the greater influence of mother language. Next, naturally, children are more curious and eager to learn new things in their tender age. Therefore, proficiency and fluency in new or unfamiliar language can be achieved at primary school which would help them enormously in the long run. Lastly, excellence in foreign languages is greatly beneficial for professional development as well as financial betterment. Since a long time is needed for acquiring deep knowledge in every language, every child has to start learning a second language as early as possible, otherwise, their future will not be safe. However, there are certain drawbacks that cannot be avoided if a child starts learning a foreign language in the very early stage. Firstly, they cannot understand the real meaning of many aspects of the language as they are not mature enough. Moreover, they sometimes do not take the language learning seriously. As a result, the importance of that language will be reduced in their mind, which would cause many detrimental effects. Furthermore, sometimes, children show disrespect and lack of interest towards foreign language because of the increased workload in schools. As a consequence, they may develop a negative attitude in learning, especially towards language learning. To conclude, despite certain disadvantages, a vast amount of benefits should be considered by society and individuals while deciding whether their school going children should learn a foreign language or not.
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foreign
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languages
should
be taught
at the primary
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school
level for the betterment of
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children
. I
strongly
believe that it has more advantages than the disadvantages.

There are several advantages of studying a
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foreign
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language
from primary level.
First
and foremost, during this period,
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children
are more
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flexible and
they can grasp any
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language
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very
easily
.
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But
, if they try to learn in their secondary level, they cannot follow
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rules
and regulations of other
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languages
easily
due to the greater influence of mother
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language
.
Next
,
naturally
,
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children
are more curious and eager to learn new things in their tender age.
Therefore
, proficiency and fluency in new or unfamiliar
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language
can
be achieved
at primary
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school
which would
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help
them
enormously
in the long run.
Lastly
, excellence in
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foreign
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languages
is
greatly
beneficial for professional development
as well
as financial betterment. Since a long time
is needed
for acquiring deep knowledge in every
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language
, every child
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has to
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start
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learning
a second
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language
as early as possible,
otherwise
, their future will not be safe.

However
, there are certain drawbacks that cannot
be avoided
if a child
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starts
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learning
a
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foreign
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language
in the
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very
early stage.
Firstly
, they cannot understand the real meaning of
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many
aspects of the
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language
as they are not mature
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enough
.
Moreover
, they
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sometimes
do not take the
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language
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learning
seriously
.
As a result
, the importance of that
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language
will be
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reduced
in their mind, which would cause
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many
detrimental effects.
Furthermore
,
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sometimes
,
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children
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show
disrespect and lack of interest towards
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foreign
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language
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because
of the increased workload in
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schools
. As a consequence, they may develop a
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negative
attitude in
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learning
,
especially
towards
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language
learning.

To conclude
, despite certain disadvantages, a vast amount of benefits should
be considered
by society and individuals while deciding whether their
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school
going
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children
should learn a
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foreign
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language
or not.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v. 48

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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