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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. v.3

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. v. 3
Happiness is very hard to define and it varies from person to person. While some people strive for economic success and a good social life and think that those are the main ingredient for happiness, on the contrary people who already have amassed enough riches and enjoy a good social and personal life thinks other aspects of life for being happy. The issue whether teenage times are the happiest part of our lives or not is a debatable issue and people are divided in their opinion regarding this. According to another group, adult part of the life is happier part of our lives. In my opinion, both groups have their reasoning and happiness is a state of mind that can be achieved in both parts of the life. Teen ages are the ages of dream, freedom and recklessness. This is the period when most of the teenagers do not have greater responsibilities like adult people and they enjoy lives full of joys, dream, vision. Less complexity of life touches the teenagers and the struggles they face often get redeemed with time. The harsh cruelty and complexity of life rarely touch the teenagers and they live a life which is often better than the adult people around them. Yet, this is not always true; many teenagers struggle a lot to support their family and suffer from psychological issues that might make their lives pretty complex. They mostly depend on their parents for money and are mostly guided by their parents for decisions. There are many untouched parts of life that they can’t enjoy and on the other hand that makes them less stressful. They enjoy a sound physical condition and rarely suffer from illness related to old ages. On the contrary, adult life offers more economic freedom in one hand and on the contrary many unavoidable responsibilities. The grown-up people decide their journey of life themselves and this is a freedom very few teenagers enjoy. The happiness a father feels while playing with his sons and daughters is unimaginable for a teenager. On the contrary, the suffering a father or a mother endures on their hearts for the well-being of their children is also inconceivable for teenagers. The work pressure, the responsibility, the physical conditions, the complexities and harsh reality of life make the matured life often unbearable and those people consider their teenage part as the happiest part of their life. Old times are good times and this is true for all of us. We revere the bygone times and the present is the reality which is not always smooth. In my opinion, life is as it is and being able to happy is not abide by any rules or times. Our head is a place where we can make the hell into the heaven and both earlier ages and grown up ages of our lives have their offering for being happy. We need to decide whether we want to be happy and contented with whatever we have or complain about the life.
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people
strive for economic success and a
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social
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riches and
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other aspects of
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for being
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. The issue whether teenage
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are the happiest
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part
of our
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lives
or not is a debatable issue and
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people
are divided
in their opinion regarding this. According to another group, adult
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part
of the
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life
is happier
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of our
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of the life.

Teen
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of dream, freedom and recklessness. This is the period when most of the
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teenagers
do not have greater responsibilities like adult
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people and
they
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full of joys, dream, vision. Less complexity of
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touches the
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teenagers
and the struggles they face
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get
redeemed with
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rarely touch the
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which is
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better than the adult
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around them.
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teenagers
struggle a lot to support their family and suffer from psychological issues that might
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their
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pretty complex. They
mostly
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guided by their parents for decisions. There are
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untouched
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parts
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that they can’t
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ages.

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, adult
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offers more economic freedom in one hand and on the
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unavoidable responsibilities. The grown-up
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decide their journey of
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themselves and this is a freedom
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teenagers
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. The
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a father feels while playing with his sons and daughters is unimaginable for a
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teenager
. On the
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, the suffering a father or a mother endures on their hearts for the well-being of their children is
also
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teenagers
. The work pressure, the responsibility, the physical conditions, the complexities and harsh reality of
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the matured
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consider their teenage
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as the happiest
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and this is true for all of us. We revere the bygone
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and the present is the reality which is not always smooth. In my opinion,
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life
is as it is and being able to
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happy
is not
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. Our head is a place where we can
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the hell into the heaven and both earlier
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and grown up
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of our
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have their offering for being
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. We need to decide whether we want to be
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and contented with whatever we have or complain about the
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life
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
503 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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