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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v.46

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v. 46
In our modern society, the question whether the children should start to learn a foreign language at the primary school has been widely discussed. A fair portion of people believes that studying a new foreign language at primary school is better than secondary school for children, while others hold the opposite point of view. As for me, I side with the first one. On the one hand, children at a young age are fast learners. The recent research published an education centre, indicates that children can master different languages as many as five. For some kids in China, they can even start three different languages, such English, French and German together when they are six years old. Apparently, young children have more ability to learn foreign languages. In this case, as the first study institution, primary school should offer the class of the foreign language studying for children. On the other hand, more subjects open in secondary school is the other main reason that a second language study should be started at a young age. Children start to learn some new subjects, such as Chemistry, Biology and History. The more classes they have, the more homework they need to do after school. Obviously, they would spend a little time on a foreign language. There is no doubt that it takes time to master a foreign language, especially the pronunciation. If they spend enough time on practising their speaking ability, how could we expect Chinese children speak fluent English? Therefore, children should learn a foreign language at primary school, instead of secondary school. In conclusion, in order to learn a foreign language, it is better to start it at the primary school rather than the secondary school for children.
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school
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at a young age are
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learners. The recent research published an education
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children
can master
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kids in China, they can even
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studying for children.

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Chinese
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speak fluent English?
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10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v. 46

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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