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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v.45

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v. 45
In today's modern world, language plays an indispensable role in both studies and jobs as well as during socialising. Thus, some professionals encourage the children nowadays to start learning a foreign language at primary school and claim that it will be too late for children to learn it in secondary school. In this essay, we will examine both the benefits and drawbacks of this issue. Undoubtedly, learning a totally new language is tiring and requires more time to master it. It, indirectly, increases the burden of a primary school pupil who is supposed to learn new things in a stress-free environment. If they have to learn a new language in primary school, they will be loaded with more tonnes of homework every day. In fact, more time should be allocated to study more useful subjects such as Science and Mathematics. These subjects are considered as stepping stones to a prospective job. If one day they become a scientist or a doctor, they may contribute endlessly to our nation by inventing essential drugs in combating diseases. However, there is another side of a coin always. To begin with, picking up a foreign language enables the children to develop a better foundation in a foreign language. They are more likely to speak it more confidently in front of the crowds. It is proven that children who learn a new language tend to make fewer mistakes in writing an essay. Not forgetting to mention that, they will have the ability to express things more clearly as they have a better vocabulary than those who start late. In addition, they may come across with foreign cultures when learning a foreign language. To illustrate, it can be learnt from the literature and poems. By knowing the culture of others, they may not experience cultural shock and are able to adapt well when staying in other countries for the purpose of studying. They are, obviously, become more knowledgeable and more open-minded which help them to look at a specific issue from different perspectives. In conclusion, the benefits of learning a foreign language in primary education apparently outweigh the drawbacks. I believe a person equipped with more languages is definitely needed in our society to make our country more prosperous and flourished in the decade to come.
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primary
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it in secondary
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. In this essay, we will examine both the benefits and drawbacks of this issue.

Undoubtedly
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learning
a
totally
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new
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language
is tiring and requires more time to master it. It,
indirectly
, increases the burden of a
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primary
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school
pupil who
is supposed
to
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learn
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new
things in a
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stress
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have to
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learn
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new
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primary
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school
, they will
be loaded
with more tonnes of homework every day. In fact, more time should
be allocated
to study more useful subjects such as Science and Mathematics. These subjects
are considered
as stepping stones to a prospective job. If one day they become a scientist or a doctor, they may contribute
endlessly
to our nation by inventing essential drugs in combating diseases.

However
, there is another side of a coin
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begin
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foreign
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language
enables the
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children
to develop a better foundation in a
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foreign
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language
. They are more likely to speak it more
confidently
in front of the crowds. It
is proven
that
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children
who
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learn
a
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new
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language
tend to
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fewer mistakes in writing an essay. Not forgetting to mention that, they will have the ability to express things more
clearly
as they have a better vocabulary than those who
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late.
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, they may
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cultures when
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foreign
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language
. To illustrate, it can be
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from the literature and poems. By knowing the culture of others, they may not experience cultural shock and are able to adapt well when staying in other countries for the purpose of studying. They are,
obviously
, become more knowledgeable and more open-minded which
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help
them to look at a specific issue from
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different
perspectives.

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, the benefits of
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learning
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foreign
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education
apparently
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languages
is definitely needed in our society to
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make
our country more prosperous and flourished in the decade to
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come
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v. 45

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
380 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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