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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.27

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 27
According to some academicians, it is better to introduce a foreign language in elementary school than in secondary school. I agree with this view. In my opinion, young children are better at acquiring a new language than older children. Also, learning an additional language at a young age enhances their IQ. One of the major benefits of introducing a new language early on is that it helps the child gain higher levels of proficiency in it. As a matter of fact, I grew up speaking three different languages from the age of 3 and because of this I have utmost confidence in using all of them. If I didn’t learn these languages from such an early age, I doubt that I would be fluent in them. Another advantage of learning an additional language is that it enhances the child’s cognitive skills. Studies have shown that multilingual people are smarter than monolingual people. It is no surprise then that Albert Einstein spoke 5 different languages from a young age and he was undoubtedly one of the greatest minds on earth. A potential disadvantage of learning multiple languages in primary school is that the child may confuse the foreign dialect and their native tongue. As a result, they may take longer to achieve fluency in their mother tongue. For example, we sometimes see that children born and brought up outside India have difficulty in conversing with their family in their native language. However, in my opinion, if parents make it a point to speak to their children in their mother tongue, this problem can be resolved easily. Another disadvantage of adding a new language to the primary school curriculum is that it puts an extra burden on children. Children already have a lot of subjects to learn and a new language can make the syllabus even heavier. In conclusion, educating children to be multilingual from an early age promotes better language skills and a higher IQ in them. Parents and teachers just need to ensure that the new language does not become a burden for the kids.
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academicians, it is better to introduce a foreign
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in elementary
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than in secondary
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. I
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, young
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children
are better at acquiring a
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new
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language
than older
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children
.
Also
, learning an additional
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language
at a young
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age
enhances their IQ.

One of the major benefits of introducing a
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new
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language
early on is that it
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helps
the child gain higher levels of proficiency in it. As a matter of fact, I grew up speaking three
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different
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languages
from the
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age
of 3 and
because of this
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languages
from such an early
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age
, I doubt that I would be fluent in them. Another advantage of learning an additional
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language
is that it enhances the child’s cognitive
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skills
. Studies have shown that multilingual
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people
are smarter than monolingual
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people
. It is no surprise then that Albert Einstein spoke 5
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different
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languages
from a young
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undoubtedly
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A potential disadvantage of learning multiple
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languages
in primary
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school
is that the child may confuse the foreign dialect and their native tongue.
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, they may take longer to achieve fluency in their mother tongue.
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that
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children
born and brought up outside India have difficulty in conversing with their family in their native
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language
.
However
, in my opinion, if parents
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make
it a point to speak to their
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children
in their mother tongue, this problem can
be resolved
easily
. Another disadvantage of adding a
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new
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language
to the primary
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school
curriculum is that it puts an extra burden on
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children
.
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already have
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a lot of
subjects to learn and a
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new
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language
can
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make
the syllabus even heavier.

In conclusion
, educating
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children
to be multilingual from an early
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age
promotes better
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language
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skills
and a higher IQ in them. Parents and teachers
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need to ensure that the
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new
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language
does not become a burden for the kids.
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IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6.5
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