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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than Secondary School. Do the advantage of this outweigh disadvantage? v.23

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than Secondary School. Do the advantage of this outweigh disadvantage? v. 23
How to learn a new skill had always been a topic of discussion. The policy that specialists establish to learning a new language in elementary school has both positive and negative outcomes. Children can pick up a wide range of skills in childhood. Their brains and curiosities enable them to acquire a new language easier than teenagers. For example, some researchers have illustrated that when we are young children, we enthusiastic to explore and communicate better with the subject that we have to learn. Secondly, the kids when going to elementary school in their class they are an integrated and united small society that help each other, learn by music and dance without embracing and even don’t embrace when they make mistake. By contrast, we know that youth students mostly are shy while they learn a new skill and fear to make a mistake. Although, there are some disadvantages. Primary school teachers are general and they may not have the necessary language skills. As you know taking a wrong method can keep you from succeeding. Secondly, one of the most noticeable stuff is identity. It would be very stressful when he has to learn new languages which maybe it is the third language for them. For instance, lots of researches have revealed that pupils attended an international school that taught English from grad one got lower marks in their native languages compared to their peer who was taught English later. Moreover, early childhood foreign language learning leads to difficulties in decision making and low self-esteem when talking about own themselves culture. In conclusion, the approaches and when children should learn new languages have been argued among educators who insist the more investment and research must have done to reveal what consequences can result in learning a new language in elementary school.
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had always been a topic of discussion. The policy that specialists establish to learning a
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new
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language
in elementary
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school
has both
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positive
and
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negative
outcomes.

Children can pick up a wide range of
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skills
in childhood. Their brains and curiosities enable them to acquire a
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new
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language
easier than
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teenagers
.
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some
researchers have illustrated that when we are young children,
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we enthusiastic
to explore and communicate better with the subject that we
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have to
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learn
.
Secondly
, the kids when going to elementary
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school
in their
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class
they are an integrated and united
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small
society that
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help
each other,
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learn
by music and dance without embracing and even don’t embrace when they
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make
mistake. By contrast, we know that youth students
mostly
are shy while they
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learn
a
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new
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skill
and fear to
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make
a mistake.

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disadvantages. Primary
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teachers are
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general and
they may not have the necessary
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language
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skills
.
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you from succeeding.
Secondly
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very
stressful when he
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has to
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learn
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new
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languages
which maybe it is the third
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language
for them.
For instance
, lots of researches have revealed that pupils attended an international
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school
that taught English from grad one
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got
lower marks in their native
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languages
compared to their peer who
was taught
English later.
Moreover
, early childhood foreign
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language
learning leads to difficulties in
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decision making
and low self-esteem when talking about
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own
themselves culture.

In conclusion
, the approaches and when children should
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learn
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new
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languages
have
been argued
among educators who insist the more investment and research
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must
have done to reveal what consequences can result in learning a
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new
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language
in elementary
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school
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Language is the blood of the soul into which thoughts run and out of which they grow.
Oliver Wendell Holmes

IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than Secondary School. Do the advantage of this outweigh disadvantage? v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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