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Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money. This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others. To what extent is this style of management effective? Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.3

Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money. This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others. Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard? v. 3
A few decades ago, most of our working power was employed in small businesses, where they had a close relationship with the owner, felt connected and shared his enthusiasm. Nowadays, with the globalization and the conglomeration of the western world, most of us work for someone who sits far away. His motives are unknown, thus causing a decrease in motivation. In many fields, large companies tackle that problem by rewarding employees with bonuses in an attempt to provide an incentive to work harder. However, we must ask ourselves, is it effective? I believe that the answer is not entirely straightforward. On one hand, some people value monetary bonuses and it alone can drive them to be highly productive. Those people will also state that the bonus received marks the fact that they are valuable to their company and that the money attached is but a single aspect of the encouragement received. As an example, I can attest to my wife's satisfaction and commitment to her job as a corporate lawyer following a big bonus. She felt obligated to the firm, and wanted to reciprocate their faith. On the other hand, it can be claimed that the bonus system has adverse effects as well. As this system is rather shortsighted, it is possible that a worker, who used to receive hefty bonuses, to have a slump in motivation and enthusiasm following a disappointment of not receiving the aforementioned bonus. In addition, speaking out of my own personal experience, when my spouse failed to receive her yearly financial reward, she lost some of her motivation and became frustrated. Obviously, the best way to ensure your employees are maximizing their output is to make them feel that they are an integral part of the company. If a worker feels that he shares the success of the company, he will go the extra mile in order to assist the process in any way. An internal incentive will always surpass an external one, however, they are much harder to teach and therefore are sometimes neglected. In conclusion, rewarding employees hard work by giving them extra money can have ambivalent outcomes. A manager should know his workers and devise a plan to help motivate each and every one of them on an individual basis.
A few decades ago, most of our working power
was employed
in
small
businesses, where they had a close relationship with the owner, felt connected and shared his enthusiasm. Nowadays, with the globalization and the conglomeration of the western world, most of us work for someone who sits far away. His motives are unknown,
thus
causing a decrease in motivation. In
many
fields, large
companies
tackle that problem by rewarding employees with bonuses in an attempt to provide an incentive to work harder.

However
, we
must
ask ourselves, is it effective? I believe that the answer is not
entirely
straightforward. On one hand,
some
people
value monetary bonuses and it alone can drive them to be
highly
productive. Those
people
will
also
state that the
bonus
received marks the fact that they are valuable to their
company
and that the money attached is
but
a single aspect of the encouragement received. As an example, I can attest to my wife's satisfaction and commitment to her job as a corporate lawyer following a
big
bonus
. She felt obligated to the firm, and wanted to reciprocate their faith.

On the other hand
, it can
be claimed
that the
bonus
system has adverse effects
as well
. As this system is
rather
shortsighted, it is possible that a worker, who
used
to receive hefty bonuses, to have a slump in motivation and enthusiasm following a disappointment of not receiving the aforementioned
bonus
.
In addition
, speaking out of my
own
personal experience, when my spouse failed to receive her yearly financial reward, she lost
some
of her motivation and became frustrated.

Obviously
, the best way to ensure your employees are maximizing their output is to
make
them feel that they are an integral part of the
company
. If a worker feels that he shares the success of the
company
, he will go the extra mile in order to assist the process in any way. An internal incentive will always surpass an external one,
however
, they are much harder to teach and
therefore
are
sometimes
neglected.

In conclusion
, rewarding employees
hard
work by giving them extra money can have ambivalent outcomes. A manager should know his workers and devise a plan to
help
motivate
each and every one
of them on an individual basis.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS essay Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money. This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others. Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
378 words
6.5
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