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Some countries have introduced a law to limit working hours for employees. Why is this law introduced? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development? v.1

Some countries have introduced a law to limit working hours for employees. Why is this law introduced? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development? v. 1
It is true that a law to restrict working hours has been established in several countries for some reasons. This implementation has affected employers and employees in various ways and in my opinion there are both positive and negative effects. The introduction of a law to limit working hours has a range of effects, both beneficial and negative, for employers and employees. There are two motives for such legislation: to prevent exploitation and to create more job availability. In countries where there is no such law, employees are more open to exploitation, and instead of a normal working day, they may be compelled to do physically demanding and dangerous jobs beyond what is reasonable, and with little or even no extra pay. Restricting maximum working hours is a way to protect the rights of employees in the workplace. Another benefit is the creation of more employment, so providing greater opportunitiesfor more people to get a job. Applying such a law can benefit both employees and employers. Restriction on working time helps members of staff achieve a better work-life balance. For example, they will find time for their regular exercise and for family life if working hours are fixed. This can contribute positively to improvement in their physical and mental health. When employees have better health, their productivity will increase and hence this may improve the efficiency and profitability of their organization. However, the limitation of working time can also have a negative effect on the business. With employees working fewer hours, it may be necessary to employ more people in order to remain competitive. Increasing the number of employees may affect profitability. This could lead employers to reduce pay, which in turn could lead to employee dissatisfaction and turn over. In conclusion, it seems to me that while limiting hours of work can create a more encouraging working environment, not all of the outcomes will be positive.
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working
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hours
has
been established
in several countries for
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some
reasons. This implementation has
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affected
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employers
and
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employees
in various ways and in my opinion there are both
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positive
and
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negative
effects.

The introduction of a
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law
to limit
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working
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hours
has a range of effects, both beneficial and
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negative
, for
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employers
and employees.

There are two motives for such legislation: to
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prevent
exploitation and to create more job availability. In countries where there is no such
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law
,
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employees
are more open to exploitation, and
instead
of a normal
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working
day, they may
be compelled
to do
physically
demanding and
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dangerous
jobs beyond what is reasonable, and with
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little
or even no extra pay. Restricting maximum
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working
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hours
is a way to protect the rights of
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employees
in the workplace. Another benefit is the creation of more employment,
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so
providing greater
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opportunitiesfor
more
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people
to
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get
a job.

Applying such a
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law
can benefit both
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employees
and
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employers
. Restriction on
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working
time
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helps
members of staff achieve a better work-life balance.
For example
, they will find time for their regular exercise and for family life if
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working
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hours
are
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fixed
. This can contribute
positively
to improvement in their physical and mental health. When
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employees
have better health, their productivity will increase and
hence
this may
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improve
the efficiency and profitability of their organization.
However
, the limitation of
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working
time can
also
have a
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negative
effect on the business. With
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employees
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working
fewer
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hours
, it may be necessary to employ more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in order to remain competitive. Increasing the number of
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employees
may affect profitability. This could lead
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employers
to
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reduce
pay, which in turn could lead to
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employee
dissatisfaction and turn over.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that while limiting
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hours
of work can create a more encouraging
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working
environment, not
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all of the
outcomes will be
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positive
.
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31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some countries have introduced a law to limit working hours for employees. Why is this law introduced? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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