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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. v. 1
It is clear that the invention of the Internet has led dramatic changes in the way people communicate as well as searching for information. While I agree that the Internet is an useful communication tool, I would content that it is not a reliable source of information. Firstly, it is an indisputable fact that the Internet has revolutionized the way we communicate. With the aid of many communication platforms available on the Internet such as Skype, Telegram and Facebook Messenger, people can make a call or send a message instantly regardless of distance for business purposes or contact with their friends. For example, many companies in US are integrating online interview as a part of their recuitment process. This is a cost effective method as it reduces the cost of travelling between cites of applicants, which large companies often pay for their candicates as reimbursement of travel expenses. These useful tools of communication have facilitated our contact in an active way. However, the information on the Internet can sometimes be unreliable. Whereas in the past, we mostly read the articles in established newspaper, nowadays anyone can publish information on a blog or forum without having it verified. Take fake news about Corona Virus in Vietnam as an example, as this epidemic broke out, many people in Vietnam started leaking news about the number of people infected are increasing remarkably and government was unable to control this disease, in fact this number was only 5 at that time. If those who read such falsehoods accept them as truths, they might spread this information further on social media, in turn misinforming the public. To sum up, I am of the opinion that one significant advantage of the Internet in terms of communication is undeniable, it is important to consider the disadvantage of the Internet age has created is the proliferation of fake information.
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clear
that the invention of the Internet has led dramatic
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changes
in the way
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people
communicate
as well
as searching for
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information
. While I
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agree
that the Internet is
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an
useful
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communication
tool, I would content that it is not a reliable source of information.

Firstly
, it is an indisputable fact that the Internet has revolutionized the way we communicate. With the aid of
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many
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communication
platforms available on the Internet such as Skype, Telegram and Facebook Messenger,
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people
can
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make
a call or
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send
a message
instantly
regardless of distance for business purposes or contact with their friends.
For example
,
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many
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companies
in US are integrating online interview as a part of their
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recuitment
process. This is a cost effective method as it
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reduces
the cost of travelling between cites of applicants, which large
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companies
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often
pay for their
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candicates
as reimbursement of travel expenses. These useful tools of
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communication
have facilitated our contact
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in an active way
.

However
, the
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information
on the Internet can
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sometimes
be unreliable. Whereas in the past, we
mostly
read the articles in established newspaper, nowadays anyone can publish
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information
on a blog or forum without having it verified. Take fake news about
The term "Coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
Corona Virus
in Vietnam as an example, as this epidemic broke out,
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many
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people
in Vietnam
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started
leaking news about the number of
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people
infected are increasing
remarkably
and
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government
was unable to control this disease, in fact this number was
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only
5 at that time. If those who read such falsehoods accept them as truths, they might spread this
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information
further
on social media, in turn misinforming the public.

To sum up, I am of the opinion that one significant advantage of the Internet in terms of
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communication
is undeniable, it is
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important
to consider the disadvantage of the Internet age has created is the proliferation of fake
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information
.
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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