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Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime. To what extent do you agree? v.11

Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime. v. 11
Crime is one of the most crucial problems of modern manking on the equal basis with pollution, obesity, diseases and so on. Various countries practice different ways to achieve decrease of crime rates. Placing more police employers is one of such measures. In my view, this method of control of criminals is not always effective and definitely is not the only one in the century of up-to-date technology. To begin with, plenty of policemen on the streets rarely stops criminals on the way to commit a crime. Such people usually prepare well and get ready to any predictable situation, including fights with police. There are some examples which are worth mentioning. Despite great amounts of police workers in developed European countries (Belgium, France, the Netherlands and so on) numerous terroristic crimes in recent years were not prevented. In addition, the online crimes gain a great popularity nowadays. Professional hackers and programmers have an ability to crack any computer (even computer systems of the Governments). Unfortunately, there is still no ways of preventing such types of crimes were invented but existing ones (including police) are useless in these cases. In conclusion, it seems to me that putting a greater number of policemen on the streets is not always a key to the problem of growing crime situations. Modern criminals have already been using various techniques of overcoming methods of safety including police, and police officers are senseless for online crimes.
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Crime
is one of the most crucial problems of modern
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on the equal basis with pollution, obesity, diseases and
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so
on. Various countries practice
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different
ways to achieve decrease of
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crime
rates. Placing more
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police
employers is one of such measures. In my view, this method of control of criminals is not always effective and definitely is not the
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only
one in the century of up-to-date technology.

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begin
with,
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plenty
of policemen on the streets rarely
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stops
criminals on the way to commit a
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crime
. Such
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people
usually
prepare well and
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get
ready to any predictable situation, including fights with
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police
. There are
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some
examples which are worth mentioning. Despite great amounts of
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police
workers in developed European countries (Belgium, France, the Netherlands and
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so
on) numerous terroristic
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crimes
in recent years were not
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prevented
.

In addition
, the online
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crimes
gain a great popularity nowadays. Professional hackers and programmers have an ability to crack any computer (even computer systems of the
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Governments
). Unfortunately, there is
still
no ways of preventing such types of
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crimes
were invented
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but
existing ones (including
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police)
are useless in these cases.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that putting a greater number of policemen on the streets is not always a key to the problem of growing
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crime
situations. Modern criminals have already been using various techniques of overcoming methods of safety including
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police
, and
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police
officers are senseless for online
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crimes
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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