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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.3

Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live 3
Modern humanity aims to explore everything that surrounds us. Due to up-to-date technology and scientific discoveries, mankind has a great opportunity to investigate the boundless space. However, the controversial question appears: do people, in fact, need space exploration rather than resolving actual “Earth problems”? While there are some good arguments in favour of maintaining researching far universe, I believe the resources and efforts should be sent, first of all, to solve crucial problems on our home planet. Space exploration, obviously, is one of the major concerns nowadays. Moreover, the projects in this area has already shown some valuable insights for humanity. The challenge of ovepopulation and resources depletions is the general concern of scientists. Searching new planets (which are suitable for people’s life or which are abundant in essential resources) is what modern space science dealing with. In addition, by discovering the universe, scientists may explore new forms of life. They might be beneficial for mankind for some yet unpredicatable reasons. As it is usually shown in films, aliens can give people some tips on how to improve our being. That is why space exploration is worth continuing. However, there are some faults with this reasoning. To begin with, meeting with inhabitants of unknown planets is impossible to predict. It may cause irreversible consequences for Earth: people never know what is in their minds. To add, the existence of aliens is a disputable concern: there are no scientific justifications in fabour of it. This way, people waste financial resources on what possibly even never exists. Finally, there is no one space discovery yet that could be an advantage in crucial mankind challenges such as pollution, poverty, obesity and so on. Personally, I view space exploration in not an urgent case for Earth. Did you know that World Ocean has been explored by around 5% yet? It seems to be strange that mankind strives to subdue the universe while there are still so many unexplored points. Maybe sooner or later people can find all answers to their questions by studying their home planet? To conclude, space exploration might be considered as a source of getting knowledge about other planets and of finding solutions to the world challenges. However, I feel such unpredictable discoveries may result in troublesome consequences. In my opinion, our planet still needs deep studying, therefore, the resources are better to spend on it rather than on unattainable space.
Modern humanity aims to explore everything that surrounds us. Due to up-to-date technology and scientific discoveries,
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mankind
has a great opportunity to investigate the boundless
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space
.
However
, the controversial question appears: do
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people
, in fact, need
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space
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exploration
rather
than resolving actual “Earth problems”? While there are
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some
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good
arguments in
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favour
of maintaining researching far universe, I believe the resources and efforts should be
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sent
,
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first of all
, to solve crucial problems on our home planet.

Space
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exploration
,
obviously
, is one of the major concerns nowadays.
Moreover
, the projects in this area has already shown
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some
valuable insights for humanity. The challenge of
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ovepopulation
and resources
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depletions
is the general concern of scientists. Searching new
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planets
(which are suitable for
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people’s
life or which are abundant in essential resources) is what modern
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space
science dealing with.
In addition
, by discovering the universe, scientists may explore new forms of life. They might be beneficial for
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mankind
for
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some
yet
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unpredicatable
reasons. As it is
usually
shown in films, aliens can give
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people
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some
tips on how to
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improve
our being.
That is
why
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space
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exploration
is worth continuing.

However
, there are
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some
faults with this reasoning. To
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begin
with, meeting with inhabitants of unknown
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planets
is impossible to predict. It may cause irreversible consequences for Earth:
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people
never know what is in their minds. To
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add
, the existence of aliens is a disputable concern: there are no scientific justifications in
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fabour
of it. This way,
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people
waste financial resources on what
possibly
even never exists.
Finally
, there is no one
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space
discovery
yet
that could be an advantage in crucial
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mankind
challenges such as pollution, poverty, obesity and
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so
on.

Personally
, I view
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space
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exploration
in not an urgent case for Earth. Did you know that World Ocean has
been explored
by around 5%
yet
? It seems to be strange that
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mankind
strives to subdue the universe while there are
still
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so
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many
unexplored points. Maybe sooner or later
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people
can find all answers to their questions by studying their home planet?

To conclude
,
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space
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exploration
might
be considered
as a source of getting knowledge about other
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planets
and of finding solutions to the world challenges.
However
, I feel such unpredictable discoveries may result in troublesome consequences. In my opinion, our
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planet
still
needs deep studying,
therefore
, the resources are better to spend on it
rather
than on unattainable
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space
.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live 3

Essay
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5 paragraphs
400 words
6.0
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