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The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayer’s money. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayer’s money. v. 3
Some countries experience a completely new way of punishing criminals in prisons: prisoners attend educational sessions or do some jobs in order to upgrade their views and attitudes and to have possibilities of having a normal life and holding a position after their relief. However, it is usually believed that such offers for criminals are wrongful and do not influence prisoners at all. I share this point of view and would like to justify my view by arguments and facts. To begin with, the initial idea of jails is to punish people commited crimes. Prisoners are to understand and realize that their crimes were wrong decisions and victims of their crimes did not deserve such treatment. Complete isolation, lack of full communication and uncomfortable living conditions form effective way of punishment. It seems to be ridiculous situation when prisoners receive an offer to get educated freely as even people out of prisons cannot usually afford themselves education. In addition, there are numerous situations when ex-offenders couldn’t get used to normal routine life. They do not know how to live, earn money and build relationships. Moreover, they tend to repeat their crimes. It seems to me that training courses during jailing do not change this state of affairs. People after prisons usually have other way of thinking and are not adapted for usual life any more. In conclusion, striving of “recovering” offenders is a waste of time and money for the reason, to my mind, it have no expected effect on prisoners.
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countries experience a completely new way of punishing criminals in prisons:
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prisoners
attend educational sessions or do
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some
jobs in order to upgrade their views and attitudes and to have possibilities of having a normal life and holding a position after their relief.
However
, it is
usually
believed that such offers for criminals are wrongful and do not influence
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prisoners
at all. I share this point of view and would like to justify my view by arguments and facts.

To
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begin
with, the initial
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idea
of jails is to punish
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people
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commited
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crimes
.
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Prisoners
are to understand and realize that their
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crimes
were
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wrong
decisions and victims of their
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crimes
did not deserve such treatment. Complete isolation, lack of full communication and uncomfortable living conditions form effective way of punishment. It seems to be ridiculous situation when
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prisoners
receive an offer to
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get
educated
freely
as even
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people
out of prisons cannot
usually
afford themselves education.

In addition
, there are numerous situations when ex-offenders couldn’t
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get
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used
to normal routine life. They do not know how to
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live
, earn money and build relationships.
Moreover
, they tend to repeat their
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crimes
. It seems to me that training courses during jailing do not
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change
this state of affairs.
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People
after prisons
usually
have other way of thinking and are not adapted for usual life
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
.

In conclusion
, striving of “recovering” offenders is a waste of time and money for the reason, to my mind, it
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have
no
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expected
effect on
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prisoners
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayer’s money. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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