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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while other thinks is has disadvantages to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.8

Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while other thinks is has disadvantages to this. v. 8
Sport is an important part of healthy life and nowadays it is connected to marketing strategies, most of the companies use as a tool in order to endorse their products. The majority of the population thinks that it is a great thing to increase particular products sells, boost stock values and overall revenue in terms of the company’s prospect. However, others believe that it has a tremendous drawback in relation to consumers. In my opinion, definitely, it will impose negative aspects that might affect general people. A sport plays a vital role in everyone’s life; recent marketing trends are changing radically in the sports industry because it is used as a marketing medium to sell products or services. Most of the people love sports, they stimulated to buy products/services and the companies use this thing as a tool to promote their products by backing sports events. For example, IPL Cricket matches are one of the most famous game events in India, which is organized every year in the month of spring. Around 90% of Indian companies sponsor IPL matches and displays their products/services in order to boost their sales which ultimately increase their revenues and financial prospects. On the other hand, sponsoring sports events will encourage people to purchase things which they rarely use in daily life. In this case, people who are interested in sports will spend a huge amount of money on things related to sports they love and those we can count as un-necessary expenditure. For instance, according to a survey reported by the BBC news regarding general population spending in one month of IPL matches in 2018. The results were pretty shocking as people spend around 40% extra money as compared to other months expenses on things, which are connected with the Cricket. They are buying those all just because it is endorsed by their favourite team or a player and all IPL teams including players are sponsored by local or international firms. In conclusion, sponsoring sports will definitely hike sports as well as company stocks. Nevertheless, in my opinion, it has too much downside in terms of the general public. It is simply a mind-diversion of people, which is encouraging them to buy services/products they really don’t need in daily life scenarios.
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Sport
is an
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important
part of healthy
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life
and nowadays it
is connected
to marketing strategies, most of the
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companies
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use
as a tool in order to endorse their
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products
. The majority of the population
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thinks
that it is a great thing to increase particular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
sells, boost stock values and
overall
revenue in terms of the
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company’s
prospect.
However
, others believe that it has a tremendous drawback in relation to consumers. In my opinion, definitely, it will impose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
aspects that might affect general
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

A
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sport
plays a vital role in everyone’s
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life
; recent marketing trends are changing
radically
in the
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sports
industry
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because
it is
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used
as a marketing medium to sell
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products
or services. Most of the
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
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sports
, they stimulated to
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buy
products/services and the
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companies
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use
this thing as a tool to promote their
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products
by backing
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sports
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events
.
For example
,
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IPL
Cricket matches are one of the most
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famous
game
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events
in India, which
is organized
every year in the month of spring. Around 90% of Indian
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companies
sponsor
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IPL
matches and displays their products/services in order to boost their sales which
ultimately
increase their revenues and financial prospects.

On the other hand
, sponsoring
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sports
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
will encourage
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people
to
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purchase
things which they rarely
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use
in daily
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life
.
In this case
,
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people
who
are interested
in
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sports
will spend a huge amount of money on things related to
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sports
they
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love
and those we can count as
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un-necessary
expenditure.
For instance
, according to a survey reported by the BBC news regarding general population spending in one month of
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IPL
matches in 2018. The results were pretty shocking as
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people
spend around 40% extra money as compared to other months expenses on things, which
are connected
with the Cricket. They are buying those all
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just
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because
it
is endorsed
by their
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favourite
team or a player and all
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IPL
teams including players
are sponsored
by local or international firms.

In conclusion
, sponsoring
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sports
will definitely hike
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sports
as well
as
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company
stocks.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion, it has too much downside in terms of the
Consider using "public".
general public
. It is
simply
a mind-diversion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, which is encouraging them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
services/products they
really
don’t need in daily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
scenarios.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while other thinks is has disadvantages to this. v. 8

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  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
6.5
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