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Some companies have uniforms for their staffs which must be worn all the times. What are advantages for a company of having a uniform? Are there benefits of having uniform for the staff. v.1

Some companies have uniforms for their staffs which must be worn all the times. What are advantages for a company of having a uniform? Are there benefits of having uniform for the staff. v. 1
In the recent years, many people, especially in developed countries, likely to opt to live independently. Although living alone comes with several drawbacks, I would consider this more of a positive development. For various reasons, living solo may have some downside. To begin with, living on one's own can be extremely costly as life is becoming increasingly complex and property prices just skyrocketing every day. This has created a difficult situation in finding an accommodation at a reasonable price. For this reason, single occupants may have to work unbelievably hard to make their ends meet. Being a singleton has meant that they cannot expect any financial or moral support from their family or relatives in most cases. Nevertheless, lone occupants are more likely to experience depression, anxiety and uncertainty with bearing all household responsibilities on top of pursuing a work life than family oriented people. As a result, single people tend to lead a hectic as well as troublesome life with resentment and tormentation at the hands of the others and therefore resulting into an unhealthy lifestyle. On the other hand, I believe that people leading a life as single dwellers are the fortunate ones. A sense of freedom with an acute privacy is something everyone cherish for. This is the main reason why single occupant tends to be seen as a successful peer of the society. Because living a life on their own allows them to invest a precious time in the developmental growth and shape up their personality. Furthermore, single people are likely to attend more public social affairs, thus allowing cities and urban areas to re-energized as they spend more spemoney on holiday maki spend more money on holiday making, outdoor activities, or surfing other services compared to their couple counterparts. Finally, if more people became independent, the more they live greens by living in apartments or near to towns instead of living in suburb houses and commuting to work from far away stretched distance. To sum up, living by oneself may have some disadvantages, but I would argue that this development should be seen as a progress.
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developed countries
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independently
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with several drawbacks, I would consider this more of a
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positive
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living
solo may have
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some
downside. To
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just
skyrocketing every day. This has created a difficult situation in finding
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single
occupants may
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have to
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life
than family oriented
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.
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single
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people
tend to lead a hectic
as well
as troublesome
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life
with resentment and
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tormentation
at the hands of the others and
therefore
resulting into an unhealthy lifestyle.

On the other hand
, I believe that
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leading a
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life
as
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single
dwellers are the fortunate ones. A sense of freedom with an acute privacy is something everyone
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cherish
for. This is the main reason why
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occupant tends to be
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seen
as a successful peer of the society.
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life
on their
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own
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allows
them to invest a precious time in the developmental growth and shape up their personality.
Furthermore
,
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single
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people
are likely to attend more public social affairs,
thus
allowing cities and urban areas to re-energized as they spend more
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spemoney
on holiday
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spend more money on holiday making, outdoor activities, or surfing other services compared to their couple counterparts.
Finally
, if more
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became independent, the more they
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live
greens by
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in apartments or near to towns
instead
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living
in suburb
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houses
and commuting to work from far away stretched distance.

To sum up,
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by oneself may have
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some
disadvantages,
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seen
as
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a progress
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IELTS essay Some companies have uniforms for their staffs which must be worn all the times. What are advantages for a company of having a uniform? Are there benefits of having uniform for the staff. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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