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Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (e. g: environment, cost). Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (e. g: environment, cost). v. 1
It is a matter of concern that our environment which is the only reason of our existence has been going through a lot of crucial problems. Environmental problems can cause dangerous as well as catastrophic circumstances in the future, which may demolish our existence before it is too late to take essential steps. At present, degradation of the environment is the bitter truth which is hard to accept. In my opinion, it is necessary to solve this devastating problem globally. Environmental stability and world tranquility are correlated. The environment should be treated as it needs to be rather than the way people want it to be. There are major reasons because of which the environment has been collapsed and thus a lot of problems has occurred. In the present world, the advancement of technologies and lifestyles have been increasing. Therefore, industrialization has been growing up where many industries such as nuclear industry has been built to fulfil the needs of different sectors of developing countries as well as developing countries. These nuclear power plants have a huge negative impact on the environment. Though it can produce electric current as well as many resources of power in a cheaper way, the radiation come out from these plants can affect the environment vastly. Also, different kinds of pollutions have made the environment unbearable to stay. Since many natural calamities have been increasing, it is obligated to take essential steps. Developed and developing countries should reduce the uses of nuclear power. Awareness should be created among people to take care of the environment globally. Necessary treatments should be provided in the polluted areas around the world. Every country should use natural resources in a proper way. While some people think it should be dealt with nationally rather than globally. I like to state that the environmental issues are not national but global issues, because it is directly related to earth's existence. If we look at the recent Amazon rainforest fire, it had spread among different countries simultaneously and thus it needed to extinguish the fire with global help. Many countries around the world do not take much care of the environment because of the lack of awareness which has created a lot of calamities in different regions of the world. Because of this, natural assets of the earth in different countries can be destroyed. In conclusion, I support the idea of solving this problem globally as the environment belongs to not only a certain country but also to the whole world. And the consequences of environmental problems do have an impact on the existence of living beings. Thus, every country should be sincere about this issue.
It is a matter of concern that our
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environment
which is the
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only
reason of our
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existence
has been going through
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a lot of
crucial
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problems
. Environmental
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problems
can cause
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dangerous
as well
as catastrophic circumstances in the future, which may demolish our
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existence
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before
it is too late to take essential steps. At present, degradation of the
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environment
is the bitter truth which is
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hard
to accept. In my opinion, it is necessary to solve this devastating
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problem
globally.

Environmental stability and
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world
tranquility
are correlated
. The
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environment
should
be treated
as it needs to be
rather
than the way
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people
want it to be. There are major reasons
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because
of which the
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environment
has
been collapsed
and
thus
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a lot of
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problems
has occurred. In the present
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world
, the advancement of technologies and lifestyles have been increasing.
Therefore
, industrialization has been growing up where
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many
industries such as nuclear industry has
been built
to fulfil the needs of
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different
sectors of developing
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countries
as well
as developing
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countries
. These nuclear power plants have a huge
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negative
impact on the
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environment
. Though it can produce electric
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current
as well
as
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many
resources of power in a cheaper way, the radiation
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come
out from these plants can affect the
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environment
vastly
.
Also
,
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different
kinds of pollutions have made the
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environment
unbearable to stay. Since
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many
natural calamities have been increasing, it
is obligated
to take essential steps. Developed and developing
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countries
should
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reduce
the
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uses
of nuclear power. Awareness should
be created
among
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people
to take care of the
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environment
globally. Necessary treatments should
be provided
in the polluted areas around the
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world
. Every
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country
should
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use
natural resources
Consider replacing "in a proper way" with the adverb for "proper"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a proper way
.

“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
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some
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people
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think
it should
be dealt
with
nationally
rather
than globally. I like to state that the environmental issues are not national
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but
global issues,
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because
it is
directly
related to earth's
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existence
. If we look at the recent Amazon rainforest fire, it had spread among
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different
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countries
simultaneously
and
thus
it needed to extinguish the fire with global
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help
.
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Many
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countries
around the
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world
do not take much care of the
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environment
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because
of the lack of awareness which has created
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a lot of
calamities in
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different
regions of the
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world
.
Because of this
, natural assets of the earth in
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different
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countries
can be
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destroyed
.

In conclusion
, I support the
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idea
of solving this
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problem
globally as the
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environment
belongs to not
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only
a certain
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country
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but
also
to the whole
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world
. And the consequences of environmental
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problems
do have an impact on the
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existence
of living beings.
Thus
, every
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country
should be sincere about this issue.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (e. g: environment, cost). v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
443 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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