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Some companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform? v.8

Some companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform? v. 8
It is true that some people argue for the universal right to free university education. While I accept that this may suit many people, I believe that it is impractical for governments to implement such a policy. On the one hand, it is not a practical dream to expect government authorities to fund higher education for those poorer sections of society, with low incomes and no savings. Without such funding, people from poor backgrounds would be unable to attend university. As a result, they would be excluded from many well-paid careers as engineers, doctors or lawyers. Social inequalities would be perpetuated and society as a whole would suffer, since those from low-income backgrounds would have no opportunity to develop their talents. The example of the US, during the struggle for civil rights for blacks and other minorities, shows the folly of denying equal educational opportunities for the poor. On the other hand, there would be an enormous strain on government budgets if free access to university were a right for everyone. At its simplest, people from rich families can afford to pay tuition fees and for their own maintenance during their studies. Attendance at university is a privilege, not a right, and if students can afford to pay for their studies, they should do so. In practical terms, governments cannot pay for the rich as well as the poor. Governments are faced with practical decisions on how to allocate their finite budgets, and funding free higher education for everyone would mean less money to spend on pressing issues such as health care or the environment. In conclusion, I disagree with the view that free higher education should be a right for everyone in society, and funding should be limited to those who otherwise could not afford to attend university.
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argue for the universal
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free
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university
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education
. While I accept that this may suit
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many
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people
, I believe that it is impractical for
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governments
to implement such a policy.

On the one hand, it is not a practical dream to
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expect
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government
authorities to fund higher
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education
for those poorer sections of society, with low incomes and no savings. Without such funding,
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people
from poor backgrounds would be unable to attend
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university
.
As a result
, they would
be excluded
from
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many
well-paid careers as engineers, doctors or lawyers. Social inequalities would
be perpetuated
and society as a whole would suffer, since those from low-income backgrounds would have no opportunity to develop their talents. The example of the US, during the struggle for civil
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rights
for blacks and other minorities,
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shows
the folly of denying equal educational opportunities for the poor.

On the other hand
, there would be an enormous strain on
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government
budgets if
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free
access to
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university
were a
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right
for everyone. At its simplest,
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people
from rich families can afford to pay tuition fees and for their
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own
maintenance during their studies. Attendance at
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university
is a privilege, not a
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right
, and if students can afford to pay for their studies, they should do
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so
. In practical terms,
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governments
cannot pay for the rich
as well
as the poor.
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Governments
are faced
with practical decisions on how to allocate their finite budgets, and funding
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free
higher
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education
for everyone would mean less money to spend on pressing issues such as health care or the environment.

In conclusion
, I disagree with the view that
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free
higher
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education
should be a
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right
for everyone in society, and funding should
be limited
to those who
otherwise
could not afford to attend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
.
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IELTS essay Some companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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