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Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? v.4

Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? v. 4
In today’s society, some parents are becoming increasingly permissive. They do not impose sufficient discipline on their children, and in some cases buy them too many things. This essay will explore why this is not a good way to raise children and why it will have negative impacts upon them in future. While it is understandable that parents want to give their children expensive toys and let them run freely in the streets, this is actually not really an appropriate method of parenting. Having too many toys encourages children to be materialistic and does not offer them the same change to develop social skills like sharing. Furthermore, when children have asked for the toys, it gives them a sense of entitlement and even power over their parents. As for giving children too much freedom, there are obviously a great many dangers in this world from which they need to be kept safe. Children also need rules and boundaries to encourage them to develop into mature and responsible adults. If parents insist on this permissive style of parenting, their children will grow up with very different values from those of stricter parents. Children who were never forced to study will end up with poorer grades in school, and those who were given everything they wanted as children will expect everything to come easily as adults. In short, they will lead difficult and disappointing lives, in contrast with what their parents hoped. In conclusion, although it is tempting to give children whatever they want, parents ought to set rules and boundaries, and to be careful with how they reward children. If parents fail to impose a basic level of discipline, children may grow up with a poor attitude that will cause them and others to suffer.
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some
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children
, and in
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some
cases
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buy
them too
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many
things. This essay will explore why this is not a
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good
way to raise
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children
and why it will have
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negative
impacts upon them
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in future
.

While it is understandable that
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parents
want to give their
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children
expensive toys and
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let
them run
freely
in the streets, this is actually not
really
an appropriate method of parenting. Having too
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many
toys encourages
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children
to be materialistic and does not offer them the same
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change
to develop social
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skills
like sharing.
Furthermore
, when
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children
have
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asked for
the toys, it gives them a sense of entitlement and even power over their
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parents
. As for giving
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children
too much freedom, there are
obviously
a great
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many
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dangers
in this world from which they need to be
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kept
safe.
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also
need
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rules
and boundaries to encourage them to develop into mature and responsible adults.

If
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parents
insist on this permissive style of parenting, their
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children
will grow up with
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very
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different
values from those of stricter
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parents
.
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Children
who were never forced to study will
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end
up with poorer grades in school, and those who were
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given
everything they wanted as
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children
will
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expect
everything to
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come
easily
as adults. In short, they will lead difficult and disappointing
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lives
,
in contrast
with what their
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parents
hoped.

In conclusion
, although it is tempting to give
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children
whatever they want,
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parents
ought to set
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rules
and boundaries, and to be careful with how they reward
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children
. If
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parents
fail to impose a basic level of discipline,
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children
may grow up with a poor attitude that will cause them
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and others
to suffer.
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IELTS essay Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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