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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree? v.7

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 7
Parents nowadays have the option to send their wards to single-sex or mix gender schools and it is believed by some that children attending single-sex schools are at a disadvantage when it comes to future life as adults. In my opinion, I agree that children going to single-sex schools lose out on many key skills and experiences. Firstly, students attending single-gender schools do not get to have interactions with the opposite sex. This can result in challenges in the future when they have to work alongside people of the opposite gender in a team environment, in other words, they might face difficulties in properly communicating and interacting, which can have a negative impact on their performance as well as that of others. Moreover, this might be exacerbated if are working for someone of the opposite sex, since the lack of experience and understanding of the other gender might make it hard. Another point to consider as to why mixed gender schools are beneficial for children, is that they expose them to different viewpoints. Girls and boys think differently and they have varied perspectives on issues and handling scenarios, therefore, children in single-sex schools miss out on these opportunities to be involved in and gain an understanding of differing opinions. In life they will have to deal with people who have a different viewpoint, and due to a lack of exposure to such experiences, they will face challenges in dealing with such scenarios. As a result, this could also lead to marital issues and could turn into unpleasant situations. Therefore, early teenage interactions with students from the other sex will immensely help them in their future. In conclusion, even though parents these days have options to send their child to single or mixed gender schools, I believe there is a lot to be gained by enrolling their children in a co-ed school and the experiences will stand them in good stead later on in their lives.
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send
their wards to single-sex or mix gender
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schools
and it
is believed
by
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some
that
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children
attending single-sex
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schools
are at a disadvantage when it
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comes
to future life as adults. In my opinion, I
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agree
that
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children
going to single-sex
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schools
lose out on
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many
key
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skills
and experiences.

Firstly
, students attending single-gender
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schools
do not
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get
to have interactions with the opposite sex. This can result in challenges in the future when they
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have to
work alongside
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people
of the opposite gender in a team environment, in
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other
words, they might face difficulties in
properly
communicating and interacting, which can have a
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negative
impact on their performance
as well
as that of others.
Moreover
, this might
be exacerbated
if are working for someone of the opposite sex, since the lack of experience and understanding of the
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other
gender might
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make
it
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hard
.

Another point to consider as to why mixed gender
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schools
are beneficial for
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children
, is that they expose them to
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different
viewpoints. Girls and boys
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think
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differently and
they have varied perspectives on issues and handling scenarios,
therefore
,
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children
in single-sex
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schools
miss out on these opportunities to
be involved
in and gain an understanding of differing opinions. In
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life they
will
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have to
deal with
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people
who have a
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different
viewpoint, and due to a lack of exposure to such experiences, they will face challenges in dealing with such scenarios.
As a result
, this could
also
lead to marital issues and could turn into unpleasant situations.
Therefore
, early teenage interactions with students from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
sex will
immensely
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help
them in their future.

In conclusion
,
even though
parents these days have options to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
their child to single or mixed gender
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
, I believe there is a lot to
be gained
by enrolling their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
in a co-ed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
and the experiences will stand them in
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good
stead later on in their
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lives
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
7.5
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