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Some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy too difficult to learn, so some people argue that those subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy too difficult to learn, so some people argue that those subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. v. 2
Presently, most of the people are showing interest to choose their children's subject in Maths and Philosophy. Besides, certain children were not capable of learning this subject very fast. So, those people suggest that these subjects should not be considered as mandatory. In this essay, I disagree with this viewpoint and suggest my opinion. Interestingly, the public is suggested their children's to study in Maths and Philosophy because of their usage in an everyday life. If a person had to achieve success, then they had to impress the other person by showing their talents. Indeed, these topics help them to impress the other person easily, whereas they also try to represent their extra-ordinary skills. A research stated that 75% of the graduates, who had graduated in the topics like differentiation, had got placed in the various multi-national organizations. On the other hand, the students may find it difficult in dealing with these topics, but they can be utilized in improving the memory. Even though the student had a plenty of knowledge in the survival skills, it was mandatory for them to calculate the pulse of the patient. For instance, it is compulsory to maintain time, while meeting a person, but they can manage their schedule by doing the perfect calculations. In the conclusion, a likely reason why most of the parent's were willing to force their children in Mathematics and Philosophy because they will help them in the future. However, to become a successful person in the society, they had to be good at managing time and in understanding the society. I believe that subjects like Mathematics and Philosophy always try to represent the knowledge of a person and the government authorities should not consider these subjects as optional.
Presently
, most of the
people
are showing interest to choose their children's
subject
in
Maths
and
Philosophy
.
Besides
, certain children were not capable of learning this
subject
very
fast
.
So
, those
people
suggest that these
subjects
should not
be considered
as mandatory. In this essay, I disagree with this viewpoint and suggest my opinion.

Interestingly
, the public
is suggested
their children's to study in
Maths
and
Philosophy
because
of their usage in an everyday life. If a
person
had to achieve success, then they had to impress the other
person
by showing their talents.
Indeed
, these topics
help
them to impress the other
person
easily
, whereas they
also
try to represent their extra-ordinary
skills
.
A research
stated that 75% of the graduates, who had graduated in the topics like differentiation, had
got
placed in the various multi-national organizations.

On the other hand
, the students may find it difficult in dealing with these topics,
but
they can
be utilized
in improving the memory.
Even though
the student had a
plenty
of knowledge in the survival
skills
, it was mandatory for them to calculate the pulse of the patient.
For instance
, it is compulsory to maintain time, while meeting a
person
,
but
they can manage their schedule by doing the perfect calculations.

In the conclusion, a likely reason why most of the parent's were willing to force their children in Mathematics and
Philosophy
because
they will
help
them in the future.
However
, to become a successful
person
in the society, they had to be
good
at managing time and in understanding the society. I believe that
subjects
like Mathematics and
Philosophy
always try to represent the knowledge of a
person
and the
government
authorities should not consider these
subjects
as optional.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy too difficult to learn, so some people argue that those subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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