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Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v.1

Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 1
Currently, people are increasingly doing their shopping on the Internet instead of going to stores. I personally believe this tendency has both positive and negative effects, which will be discussed below. On the one hand, there are some benefits of online shopping. Firstly, it is a quicker and cheaper way to shop since people can buy products at home without having to go to stores or shopping malls. For example, Amazon and AliExpress are two popular websites that provide a huge number of different products, and customers can visit those sites and make purchases easily. As a result, consumers can save time and the costs of travelling. Secondly, online shopping allows people to have a wider range of choices as they can compare different brands and products. For instance, buyers can easily compare the shoes of Adidas and Nike, while it is difficult to do that at physical stores. On the other hand, online shopping can be negative in several ways. The first drawback is that customers cannot try products before making a purchase. For example, a girl cannot try wearing a dress to see if it fits her body. Furthermore, products sold online are often less reliable, and the product that people finally get delivered to their house might have a poorer quality than expected. Finally, because online shopping is easier and cheaper, people tend to buy too much, which would lead to a large waste of money. This is less likely to happen if shopping in stores is more popular. In conclusion, I believe the fact that shopping on the Internet is replacing shopping in physical stores is both positive and negative.
Currently
,
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people
are
increasingly
doing their
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shopping
on the Internet
instead
of going to
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stores
. I
personally
believe this tendency has both
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positive
and
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negative
effects, which will
be discussed
below.

On the one hand, there are
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some
benefits of
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online
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shopping
.
Firstly
, it is a quicker and cheaper way to shop since
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people
can
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buy
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products
at home without having to go to
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stores
or
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shopping
malls.
For example
, Amazon and AliExpress are two popular websites that provide a huge number of
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different
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products
, and customers can visit those sites and
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make
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purchases
easily
.
As a result
, consumers can save time and the costs of travelling.
Secondly
,
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online
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shopping
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allows
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people
to have a wider range of choices as they can compare
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different
brands and
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products
.
For instance
, buyers can
easily
compare the shoes of Adidas and Nike, while it is difficult to do that at physical stores.

On the other hand
,
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online
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shopping
can be
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negative
in several ways. The
first
drawback is that customers cannot try
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products
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before
making a
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purchase
.
For example
, a girl cannot try wearing a dress to
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see
if it fits her body.
Furthermore
,
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products
sold
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online
are
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often
less reliable, and the
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product
that
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people
finally
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get
delivered to their
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house
might have a poorer quality than
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expected
.
Finally
,
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because
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online
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shopping
is easier and cheaper,
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people
tend to
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buy
too much, which would lead to a large waste of money. This is less likely to happen if
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shopping
in
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stores
is more popular.

In conclusion
, I believe the fact that
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shopping
on the Internet is replacing
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shopping
in physical
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stores
is both
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positive
and
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negative
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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