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Some people think that some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy are too difficult for children to learn at school They think that these subjects should be made optional rather than compulsory To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Some people think that some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy are too difficult for children to learn at school They think that these subjects should be made optional rather than compulsory v. 2
Nowadays, more and more students have difficulties in studying mathematics and philosophy. I suggest that either philosophy or mathematics should be mandatory for all students because these two subjects develop logical or rational thinking, useful for the further education. Mathematics should be compulsory for all people who do sciences. Therefore, mathematics influences the power of making connections between theory and applied situations. Many people will be capable of linking logically the new concepts with their experience knowledge. For instance, interpretation of acceleration and speed in physics requires some useful captures in Mathematics such as integrals, derivates. What is more, even though maths can mean just only calculus, this subject can explain the configuration of many creatures in the wild, for example, sunflowers. Philosophy should be compulsory for all people who learn an art. Therefore, philosophy influences the power of reasoning according to a thesis. Many people will be able to explain rationally important terms which are important for current situations in the world. For example, the UNO' s principles are formulated according to some ideas given by philosophers who lived during the second world war. What is more, even though philosphy can mean only memorising the quotes of famous people, this subject can develop critical thinking. In conclusion, mathematics and philosophy can develop and improve some cognitive abilities.
Nowadays, more and more students have difficulties in studying
mathematics
and
philosophy
. I suggest that either
philosophy
or
mathematics
should be mandatory for all students
because
these two subjects develop logical or rational thinking, useful for the
further
education.

Mathematics should be compulsory for all
people
who do sciences.
Therefore
,
mathematics
influences the power of making connections between theory and applied situations.
Many
people
will be capable of linking
logically
the new concepts with their experience knowledge.
For instance
, interpretation of acceleration and speed in physics requires
some
useful captures in
Mathematics
such as integrals,
derivates
.
What is more
,
even though
maths can
mean
just
only
calculus, this subject can
explain
the configuration of
many
creatures in the wild,
for example
, sunflowers.

Philosophy should be compulsory for all
people
who learn an art.
Therefore
,
philosophy
influences the power of reasoning according to a thesis.
Many
people
will be able to
explain
rationally
important
terms which are
important
for
current
situations in the world.
For example
, the
UNO&
#039; s principles
are formulated
according to
some
ideas
given
by philosophers who
lived
during the second world war.
What is more
,
even though
philosphy
can mean
only
memorising
the quotes of
famous
people
, this subject can develop critical thinking.

In conclusion
,
mathematics
and
philosophy
can develop and
improve
some
cognitive abilities.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy are too difficult for children to learn at school They think that these subjects should be made optional rather than compulsory v. 2

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