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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v.1

In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
There is increasing concern in many countries that newspapers are not being read and the news on television is not being watched by many young people. As a result, young people in these countries are not up-to-date with or even concerned about local, national and international events. The major causes of this problem are that most newspapers and news programmes are designed for an adult audience and are not presented in a format that teenagers find attractive. Few young people read newspapers because the language is too difficult and the style and content is usually quite serious. A lack of interest in the news is also due to the fact that young people are fascinated by new technology, such as computers and the Internet. As a result of this there is a lower interest in traditional news formats, which are considered unappealing and unfashionable. There are some strategies that can be used to encourage young people to keep abreast of the news. The first is to have news agencies present the news in formats that are appealing for the young. The easiest way to do this would be to present news on internet sites that are designed for a younger audience. Another way to confront the problem is to have schools involved in the publication of regular school newspapers. Recent local, national and international news events could be included, although schools should also encourage pupils to be involved in the writing of articles and submissions. This newspaper could then be distributed to all the pupils, which means a greater number of young people would regularly read news stories. The low number of young people reading newspapers and following the news on television can be increased by presenting the news in formats that are appealing to them. The key is to utilise websites and also have schools publish their own newspapers, which students are involved in.
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news
on television is not being
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watched
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young
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,
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young
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people
in these countries are not up-to-date with or even concerned about local, national and international
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events
.

The major causes of this problem are that most
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newspapers
and
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news
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programmes
are designed
for an adult audience and are not presented in a
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format
that
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teenagers
find attractive. Few
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young
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people
read
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newspapers
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because
the language is too difficult and the style and content is
usually
quite serious. A lack of interest in the
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news
is
also
due to the fact that
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young
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people
are fascinated
by
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new
technology, such as computers and the Internet.
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of this there is a lower interest in traditional
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news
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formats
, which
are considered
unappealing and unfashionable.

There are
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some
strategies that can be
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used
to encourage
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young
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people
to
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keep
abreast of the
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news
. The
first
is to have
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news
agencies present the
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news
in
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formats
that are appealing for the
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young
. The easiest way to do this would be to present
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news
on internet sites that
are designed
for a younger audience. Another way to confront the problem is to have
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schools
involved in the publication of regular
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school
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newspapers
. Recent local, national and international
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news
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events
could
be included
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schools
should
also
encourage pupils to
be involved
in the writing of articles and submissions. This
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newspaper
could then
be distributed
to all the pupils, which means a greater number of
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young
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people
would
regularly
read
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news
stories.

The low number of
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young
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people
reading
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newspapers
and following the
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news
on television can
be increased
by presenting the
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news
in
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formats
that are appealing to them. The key is to
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websites and
also
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schools
publish their
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own
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newspapers
, which students
are involved
in.
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43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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