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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience v.2

Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. 2
Employees to achieve their goals should not only depend on technical skills, also need to have interpersonal skills. Most of the employers believe that new starters lack basic interpersonal skills. This essay focuses on the causes for the reason and suggest the required solution. New employees are recruited straight away after their graduation. Most of the universities are focussing strongly on core skills, ignoring non technical skills like cooperative and organisational skills. For instance, I finished my graduation with good grades. Although to achieve non technical skills, I went to online course. Moreover, an introvert person finds difficult to mingle in a team. Nowadays, many companies are asking their interviewers to appoint people who have soft skills. To overcome this, a person should balance their academic goals and interpersonal skills. Universities and colleges should introduce a curriculum with special care on non-technical skills. Team lead or manager should make the team feel comfortable. Furthermore, the employee should also focus on improving these by maintaining social networking with the team and with other teams as well. For example, If we attend any meetings or seminars, try to make conversations with unknown people. In concluding, Interpersonal skills, play a vital role in employee and firm growth. This can be achieved by many ways like participating in teams and small coffee catch ups. From schooling one should pivot on non-technical skills
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Employees
to achieve their goals should not
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only
depend on technical
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skills
,
also
need to have
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interpersonal
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skills
. Most of the employers believe that new starters lack basic
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interpersonal
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skills
. This essay focuses on the causes for the reason and suggest the required solution.

New
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employees
are recruited
straight away after their graduation. Most of the universities are focussing
strongly
on core
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skills
, ignoring
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non technical
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skills
like cooperative and
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organisational
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skills
.
For instance
, I finished my graduation with
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good
grades. Although to achieve
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non technical
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skills
, I went to online course.
Moreover
, an introvert person finds difficult to mingle in a
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team
. Nowadays,
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many
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companies
are asking their interviewers to appoint
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people
who have soft
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skills
.

To overcome this, a person should balance their academic goals and
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interpersonal
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skills
. Universities and colleges should introduce a curriculum with special care on non-technical
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skills
.
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Team
lead or manager should
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make
the
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team
feel comfortable.
Furthermore
, the
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employee
should
also
focus on improving these by maintaining social networking with the
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team
and with other
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teams
as well
.
For example
, If we attend any meetings or seminars, try to
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make
conversations with unknown
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people
.

In concluding,
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Interpersonal
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skills
, play a vital role in
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employee
and firm growth. This can
be achieved
by
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many
ways like participating in
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teams
and
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small
coffee catch ups. From schooling one should pivot on non-technical
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skills
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
227 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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