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some businesses find that their new employees lack in basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. what are the causes? suggest possible solutions. v.1

some businesses find that their new employees lack in basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. what are the causes? suggest possible solutions. v. 1
At the moment, it is commonly believed that when new employees join any organisation they cannot get along well with others because of their inefficiency in collaboration skills. This situation occurs due to ineffective training programmes and education system. Mainly these two factors are to be blamed for this. However, it is not a matter of concern if the team is made part of the curriculum as well as employee induction programme. A Major factor behind the lack of interpersonal skills among new workers is due to fruitless education sector and inept training offered by the government. By this I mean that the most of the educational institutes concentrate on improving the academic ability of the pupils rather than focusing on teamwork. As a result, students are unaware of the concepts and significance of cooperation and combined efforts. In addition to it, many companies fail to train their potential employees such skills which shows the outcome as new joiners are lacking in cooperative skills. Though the above problems are prevalent, they can be overcome by encouraging sports in academics and interpersonal skills develop training in organisations. Through sports, students can learn how to be cooperative and understand the significance of group efforts. Nurturing these values from a young age will help them when they join firms. Moreover, companies may also conduct training programmes for new recruits on team endeavour. To exemplify, if a sample project is assigned to a group as part of training employees will not only develop their technical skills but also realise the values of group work. To conclude, new employees lack of interpersonal skills because schools and companies neglect the importance of developing personality traits. In tackling this, sports should be made a part of the curriculum and organisation should arrange training sessions.
At the moment, it is
commonly
believed that when
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new
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employees
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join
any
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organisation
they cannot
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get
along well with others
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because
of their inefficiency in collaboration
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skills
. This situation occurs due to ineffective
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training
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programmes
and education system.
Mainly
these two factors are to
be blamed
for this.
However
, it is not a matter of concern if the team
is made
part of the curriculum
as well
as
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employee
induction
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programme
.

A Major factor behind the lack of interpersonal
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skills
among
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new
workers is due to fruitless education sector and inept
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training
offered by the
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government
. By this I mean that the most of the educational institutes concentrate on improving the academic ability of the pupils
rather
than focusing on teamwork.
As a result
, students are unaware of the concepts and significance of cooperation and combined efforts.
In addition
to it,
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many
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companies
fail to train their potential
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employees
such
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skills
which
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shows
the outcome as
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new
joiners are lacking in cooperative
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skills
.

Though the above problems are prevalent, they can
be overcome
by encouraging sports in academics and interpersonal
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skills
develop
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training
in
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organisations
. Through sports, students can learn how to be cooperative and understand the significance of group efforts. Nurturing these values from a young age will
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help
them when they
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join
firms.
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,
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companies
may
also
conduct
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training
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programmes
for
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new
recruits on team
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endeavour
. To exemplify, if a sample project
is assigned
to a group as part of
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training
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employees
will not
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only
develop their technical
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skills
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but
also
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realise
the values of group work.

To conclude
,
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new
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employees
lack of interpersonal
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skills
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because
schools and
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companies
neglect the importance of developing personality traits. In tackling this, sports should
be made
a part of the curriculum and
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organisation
should arrange
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training
sessions.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay some businesses find that their new employees lack in basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. what are the causes? suggest possible solutions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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