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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. v. 3
Taking care of old buildings and repairing them cost too much. It is argued that instead of spending huge money on these old buildings, it should be used to build modern buildings. This essay agrees with that suggestion because it will save a lot of money. The essay will first look at how the wastage of money is done and then how these buildings can be dangerous for public. To embark on, spending huge amount on the buildings which requires repairing after a short spam of time is totally a waste of money. Although, the old buildings are repaired properly, it will not last longer because the material used to build the buildings has become very weak due to the human activities as well as environmental factors. So, it is better to spend money to build modern buildings as money will be spent once and there will be no need of repairing again and again as in the case of old buildings. Furthermore, old buildings can also cause a threat to the life of people as the material is old and it is not sure that the old buildings will stand still, they can be felt anytime and can cause injuries to individuals or even death in some cases. For instance, in many Indian old buildings, where tourists go to visit, there is always a warning sign that even though these buildings are under proper care and are being repaired time to time but they can fall anytime as the material used is not strong enough. Thus, money can be better utilised to build modern buildings. To conclude, money to build modern buildings is far better option to save huge amounts which are being spent on taking care and repairing old buildings.
Taking care of
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old
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buildings
and
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repairing
them cost too much. It
is argued
that
instead
of spending huge
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money
on these
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old
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buildings
, it should be
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used
to
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build
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modern
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buildings
. This essay
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agrees
with that suggestion
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because
it will save
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a lot of
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money
. The essay will
first
look at how the wastage of
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money
is done
and then how these
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buildings
can be
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dangerous
for public.

To embark on, spending huge amount on the
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buildings
which requires
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repairing
after a short spam of time is
totally
a waste of
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money
. Although, the
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old
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buildings
are repaired
properly
, it will not last longer
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because
the material
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used
to
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build
the
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buildings
has become
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very
weak due to the human activities
as well
as environmental factors.
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So
, it is better to spend
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money
to
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build
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modern
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buildings
as
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money
will
be spent
once and there will be no need of
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repairing
again and again as in the case of
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old
buildings.

Furthermore
,
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old
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buildings
can
also
cause a threat to the life of
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people
as the material is
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old
and it is not sure that the
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old
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buildings
will stand
still
, they can
be felt
anytime and can cause injuries to individuals or even death in
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some
cases.
For instance
, in
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many
Indian
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old
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buildings
, where tourists go to visit, there is always a warning
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sign
that
even though
these
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buildings
are under proper care and are
being repaired
time to time
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but
they can fall anytime as the material
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used
is not strong
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enough
.
Thus
,
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money
can be better
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utilised
to
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build
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modern
buildings.

To conclude
,
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money
to
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build
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modern
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buildings
is far better option to save huge amounts which are
being spent
on taking care and
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repairing
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old
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buildings
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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