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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v.9

Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v. 9
Some businesses have discovered that their newly employed individuals have no interpersonal skills. This essay will highlight reasons for this situation and also proffer remedies. There are two main reasons why new workers have no interpersonal skills. The first is the school’s curriculum. Most educational institutions focus only on the subject of interest of the student and do not include classes with a focus on development; consequently, many individuals graduate from schools without attaining this knowledge. Another cause is the interview structure. While conducting interviews, employers are more interested in the expertise of the prospective worker than development adroitness. As a result of this, these interviews are structured to access only the area of interest of the organization and other aspects are neglected. For instance, a survey in Nigeria comparing the attitudes of workers between business found out that businesses with narrow interview structures employed more workers without development expertise. There are two ways this situation can be reduced. The first one is a change of curriculum. The government should implement a change in every school’s curriculum in order to accommodate skills relating to relationships. This enables each student to acquire this expertise before graduation; thus, preparing them for real life events. For example, it was discovered after a switch in learning structure in Zambia that workers fared better in their respective organizations with regard to day to day relationships between colleagues. In addition, a change in the interview structure should be put in place. Interviews should be done to evaluate candidates, so as to weed out applicants without interpersonal skills before they are employed. In conclusion, it has been discovered by organizations that their new workers do not have the skills that borders on relationships. This essay highlighted the reasons for this and also proffered solutions
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Some
businesses have discovered that their
newly
employed individuals have no interpersonal
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skills
. This essay will highlight reasons for this situation and
also
proffer remedies.

There are two main reasons why new
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workers
have no interpersonal
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skills
. The
first
is the school’s curriculum. Most educational institutions focus
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only
on the subject of interest of the student and do not include classes with a focus on development;
consequently
,
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many
individuals graduate from schools without attaining this knowledge. Another cause is the
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interview
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structure
. While conducting
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interviews
, employers are more interested in the expertise of the prospective
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worker
than development adroitness.
As a result
of this, these
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interviews
are structured
to access
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only
the area of interest of the organization and other aspects
are neglected
.
For instance
, a survey in Nigeria comparing the attitudes of
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workers
between business found out that businesses with narrow
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interview
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structures
employed more
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workers
without development expertise.

There are two ways this situation can be
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reduced
. The
first
one is a
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change
of curriculum. The
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government
should implement a
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change
in every school’s curriculum in order to accommodate
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skills
relating to relationships. This enables each student to acquire this expertise
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before
graduation;
thus
, preparing them for real life
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events
.
For example
, it
was discovered
after a switch in learning
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structure
in Zambia that
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workers
fared better in their respective organizations with regard
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to day to day
relationships between colleagues.
In addition
, a
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change
in the
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interview
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structure
should
be put
in place.
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Interviews
should
be done
to evaluate candidates,
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so as to
weed out applicants without interpersonal
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skills
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before
they
are employed
.

In conclusion
, it has
been discovered
by organizations that their new
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workers
do not have the
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skills
that borders on relationships. This essay highlighted the reasons for this and
also
proffered
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solutions
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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