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Some believe that training is necessary to be a good teacher, others think that teachers don’t need a training course. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some believe that training is necessary to be a good teacher, others think that teachers don’t need a training course. v. 2
Training plays a vital role in overall development of any professional. In case of teachers, it is thought by some that getting trained is not essential for the reason that this type of profession does not requires to get trained and hence can be avoided. Whereas, for others, it is of an utmost importance as it not only provides a methodology to follow, but also generates unique ways in which students can be taught. In my opinion, the latter one proves to be more fruitful and should be followed. Owing to the procedure followed, trainers can easily impart basic lessons in a meaningful way. In other words, they can make learning an easy process by dividing the overall course structure and following up one topic at a time. Consequently, this helps in saving time and makes learners focus precisely to important things. To exemplify, Indian Business School recently came up with mandatory training of 2 months for new faculty. This practice helped them in communication process with students and they were able to pass their knowledge in an enhanced manner, leading to an increase in better final results. Additionally, this process results in creation of new ways of teaching. It helps in origination of innovative methods by brainstorming, which in turn, can be more effective. Furthermore, it may have a positive approach, as well as a fresh idea of learning things with wider perspective and henceforth, can turn out to be a major asset in terms of teaching as a profession. Coming to the part wherein it is felt by some that training need not be present in education process, is perceived by them as redundant. It is a result of prolonged traditional way of practicing, which has made these people adamant. To illustrate, government teachers in India are not required to go through a general training process of how to teach. When asked them to follow up a new regime of getting trained first, they instantly declared an all India strike and somehow government dropped this idea. As, a result, students of government schools are yet to make a mark in educational sector. To conclude, a good number of people still tend to follow the easy path of traditional way of doing things and not indulge in a required training process, which can cause detrimental impact on learning of children. If not trained, these individuals may lack basic understanding of how to teach productively. And according to me, the idea of a proper step by step guide to teach should be made compulsory.
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Training
plays a vital role in
overall
development of any professional. In case of teachers, it is
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thought
by
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some
that getting
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trained
is not essential for the reason that this type of profession does not
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requires
to
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get
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trained
and
hence
can
be avoided
. Whereas, for others, it is of an utmost importance as it not
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only
provides a methodology to follow,
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but
also
generates unique
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ways
in which students can
be taught
. In my opinion, the latter one proves to be more fruitful and should
be followed
.

Owing to the procedure followed, trainers can
easily
impart basic lessons in a meaningful
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way
.
In other words
, they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
learning an easy
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process
by dividing the
overall
course structure and following up one topic at a time.
Consequently
, this
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helps
in saving time and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
learners focus
precisely
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
things. To exemplify, Indian Business School recently came up with mandatory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
of 2 months for new faculty. This practice
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
them in communication
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process
with
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students and
they were able to pass their knowledge
Consider replacing "in an enhanced manner" with the adverb for "enhanced"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an enhanced manner
, leading to an increase in better final
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results
.
Additionally
, this
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process
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results
in creation of new
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ways
of teaching. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in origination of innovative methods by brainstorming, which in turn, can be more effective.
Furthermore
, it may have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
approach,
as well
as a fresh
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of learning things with wider perspective and henceforth, can turn out to be a major asset in terms of teaching as a profession.

Coming to the part wherein it
is felt
by
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some
that
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training
need not be present in education
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process
,
is perceived
by them as redundant. It is a
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result
of prolonged traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
of practicing, which has made these
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people
adamant. To illustrate,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
teachers in India are not required to go through a general
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
process
of how to teach. When asked them to follow up a new regime of getting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trained
first
, they
instantly
declared an all India strike and somehow
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
dropped this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
. As, a
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result
, students of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
schools are
yet
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a mark in educational sector.

To conclude
, a
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good
number of
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people
still
tend to follow the easy path of traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
of doing things and not indulge in a required
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
process
, which can cause detrimental impact on learning of children. If not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trained
, these individuals may lack basic understanding of how to teach
productively
. And according to me, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of a proper
Did you mean the adjective or adverb "step-by-step" (spelled with hyphens)?
step by step
guide to teach should
be made
compulsory.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some believe that training is necessary to be a good teacher, others think that teachers don’t need a training course. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
424 words
6.0
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