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Some believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion v.1

Some believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. 1
Quality education for children is considered to hold immense importance for all parents. Although, there are two different narratives, one believes that homework is necessary for a school student whereas, other contemplates coursework should not be given. In this essay, I will discuss both these views and share my opinion. To begin with, homework consumes energy and time of pupils from taking part in after-school extracurricular activities, essential to keep students mentally and physically strong. If students spend most of their time working on assignments and cramming class notes, undoubtedly, they will not have any competitive advantage while applying for higher studies. For example, in US, many universities have assigned certain percentage for students participating in additional activities in schools. Therefore, school educators should develop courses in such a way that students complete their work in their institute premises within dedicated time. On the contrary, many individuals think otherwise, arguably true in many contexts, that homework help students revise the lecture taught in the class. As number of subjects with different topics are taught in a day, it puts undue pressure on students to memorise everything. For example, a study by Stanford University explained that homework in many ways helped students cover topics they missed in the class. Surely, school assignments prove beneficial for pupils which facilitate them to efficiently improve their grades. However, in my opinion, if both these narratives are balanced wisely, it will have a positive impact on students. Dedicate couple of hours after school for revision as this will provide comprehensive time for students to indulge in other activities. Moreover, it will be a win-win situation for both students and their future. To conclude, homework and extracurricular activities should be parallel to each other and if one is repeatedly ignored, its repercussions will yield innumerous problems for students.
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is considered
to hold immense importance for all parents. Although, there are two
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different
narratives, one believes that
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homework
is necessary for a
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school
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student
whereas, other contemplates coursework should not be
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given
. In this essay, I will discuss both these views and share my opinion.

To
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begin
with,
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homework
consumes energy and time of pupils from taking part in after-school extracurricular
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activities
, essential to
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keep
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students
mentally and
physically
strong. If
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students
spend most of their time working on assignments and cramming
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class
notes,
undoubtedly
, they will not have any competitive advantage while applying for higher studies.
For example
, in US,
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many
universities have assigned certain percentage for
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students
participating in additional
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activities
in
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schools
.
Therefore
,
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school
educators should develop courses in such a way that
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students
complete their work in their institute premises within dedicated time.

On the contrary
,
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many
individuals
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think
otherwise
,
arguably
true in
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many
contexts, that
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homework
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help
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students
revise the lecture taught in the
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class
. As number of subjects with
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different
topics
are taught
in a day, it puts undue pressure on
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students
to
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memorise
everything.
For example
, a study by Stanford University
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explained
that
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homework
in
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many
ways
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helped
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students
cover topics they missed in the
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class
.
Surely
,
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school
assignments prove beneficial for pupils which facilitate them to
efficiently
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improve
their grades.

However
, in my opinion, if both these narratives
are balanced
wisely
, it will have a
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positive
impact on
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students
. Dedicate
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couple of
hours after
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school
for revision as this will provide comprehensive time for
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students
to indulge in other
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activities
.
Moreover
, it will be a win-win situation for both
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students
and their future.

To conclude
,
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homework
and extracurricular
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activities
should be parallel to each other and if one is
repeatedly
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ignored
, its repercussions will yield
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innumerous
problems for
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students
.
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IELTS essay Some believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
302 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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