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Some believe that people are naturally born good leaders while others think leadership skills can be learned. v.1

Some believe that people are naturally born good leaders while others think leadership skills can be learned. v. 1
Although there us an idea stating that people are naturally born great leaders, some people believe that the needed skills to be a good leader can be obtained. I agree that leadership skills can be learned, and it is not an ability that all the people can have after born. This essay discusses both points of view. On the one hand, there is an idea of borning as a good leader. In fact, there are so many characteristics that can be inherited from parents to their children. It should be noted that the way of thinking can be one of the inherited skills regarding the way that a leader thinks and acts. For instance, some children like to order other children or manage all the tasks in school. Also, some would like to be the captain of their sports team. I think that not all children have leadership skills. Although being a leader can be an inherited skill, it does not happen for all the people. On the other hand, some people think that leadership skills can be obtained. It is evident that not all people know how to be a good leader, but by studying the methods, being a perfect leader is not an unreachable goal. I agree with this point of view. Actually, I consider that every skill needed to become a leader can be reached by studying. For example, one of my friends, who was always a simple member of the teams, decided to become a leader. Interestingly, he always was the weakest member of the groups. He started to study and search the ways of becoming a good leader, and now he has one of the biggest companies, and he is a successful leader. As a result, it can be proven that leadership skills can be learned. In light of thoughts elaborated upon, it can be concluded that it is possible a child born as a leader. Also, the required skills to be a leader can be achieved by studying. This essay believes that not all the people born as a leader, but all can determine how to become a leader.
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skills
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people
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characteristics that can
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children
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that the way of thinking can be one of the inherited
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skills
regarding the way that a
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leader
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and acts.
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children
like to order other
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children
or manage all the tasks in school.
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some
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skills
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people
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skills
can
be obtained
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people
know how to be a
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,
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is not an unreachable goal. I
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with this point of view. Actually, I consider that every
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skill
needed to become a
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leader
can
be reached
by studying.
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, one of my friends, who was always a simple member of the teams, decided to become a
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leader
.
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the weakest member of the groups. He
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to study and search the ways of becoming a
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, and
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now
he has one of the biggest
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companies
, and he is a successful
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leader
.
As a result
, it can
be proven
that
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leadership
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skills
can
be learned
.

In light of thoughts elaborated upon, it can
be concluded
that it is possible a child born as a
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leader
.
Also
, the required
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skills
to be a
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leader
can
be achieved
by studying. This essay believes that not all the
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,
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all can determine how to become a
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some believe that people are naturally born good leaders while others think leadership skills can be learned. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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