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Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. v. 3
It is often said that important people are born with certain characteristics that enable them to become great leaders. The alternative view is that leadership is a learnable quality. Personally, I agree with the latter viewpoint because training and experience are more important than innate ability in this situation. It is somewhat true that many individuals are born with distinctive personal traits that allow them the opportunity to become talented leaders. Leaders tend to be those who are charming and persuasive. In contrast, those who lack of these characteristics may have a difficulty inspiring the belief and loyalty that all leaders require and end up as followers rather than leaders. For instance, a salesman who often fails to convince his clients to sign a deal may be dissuaded from becoming the sales team leader since he does not believe that he has what it takes to be one. The more convincing salesmen are more likely to rise to that role. However, there are also people who assert that leadership skills can actually be achieved through proper training and effort. That is why there is a larger number of institutes offering leadership training programmes helping those who want to learn the skills required to be a leader. Public speaking is one of many skills these schools can teach. Individuals who are shy and lack confidence can find their feet in the leadership battle by learning the essence of good body language, pronunciation, and other elements of good public speaking. This will in turn make them better leaders. In conclusion, although some traits related to leadership are likely inherited there is tremendous room for people to grow into positions of responsibility if they apply themselves fully to learning the skills and personal characteristics of great leaders.
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. The alternative view is that
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with the latter viewpoint
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individuals
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with distinctive personal traits that
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allow
them the opportunity to become talented
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.
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tend to be those
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who
are charming and persuasive.
In contrast
, those
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lack of these characteristics may have a difficulty inspiring the belief and loyalty that all
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leaders
require and
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end
up as followers
rather
than
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leaders
.
For instance
, a salesman
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often
fails to convince his clients to
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sign
a deal may
be dissuaded
from becoming the sales team
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leader
since he does not believe that he has what it takes to be one. The more convincing salesmen are more likely to rise to that role.

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also
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people
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leadership
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skills
can actually
be achieved
through proper training and effort.
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why there is a larger number of institutes offering
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training
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helping those
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who
want to learn the
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skills
required to be a
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leader
. Public speaking is one of
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many
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skills
these schools can teach. Individuals
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who
are shy and lack confidence can find their feet in the
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leadership
battle by learning the essence of
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good
body language, pronunciation, and other elements of
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good
public speaking. This will in turn
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make
them better leaders.

In conclusion
, although
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some
traits related to
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leadership
are likely inherited there is tremendous room for
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people
to grow into positions of responsibility if they apply themselves
fully
to learning the
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skills
and personal characteristics of great
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leaders
.
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Oliver Wendell Holmes

IELTS essay Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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