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All education, primary, secondary and further education should be free to all people and paid for by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

All education, primary, secondary and further education should be free to all people and paid for by the government. v. 2
This is a universally acknowledged fact that education plays a prominent role to build up a career in everybody' s life. It is believed that it should be free of cost to all individuals while other refute this thought. These points of view will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs. It has always been regarded that some people cannot afford the cost of education. It may have a negative effect on some children as well. For instance, In India, there are some children who cannot go to school because their parents have no enough money to pay education fees. Thus, it definitely enhances the illiterate rate to great extent. Also, it has a negative effect on nation economy indeed. Additionally, people pay a large amount of money in the form of various taxes like Income tax. Therefore, the regime should provide free education to their citizens so that parents can utilize money for some other purpose. However, some argue that it should be free mere up to secondary level. There are some other major issues like pollution and employment so the government has also need to pay intention on these matters. Inclusively, in colleges, the government has to pay salary to staff members, maintenance expenses which may be difficult without getting fee from learners. In addition, it declines the standard of education which has more major consequences. That is why some people gravitate towards this point of view. After analyzing the aforesaid points, it has been proven that all schooling up to secondary should be complimentary. Obviously, it helps to improve the literacy rate of a nation. However, there should be a minimal charge on university such as tuition fees. Ideally, there should be a provision of scholarship for improvement in education.
This is a
universally
acknowledged fact that
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education
plays a prominent role to build up a career in
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everybody&
#039; s life. It
is believed
that it should be free of cost to all individuals while other refute this
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thought
. These points of view will
be discussed
in the forthcoming paragraphs.

It has always
been regarded
that
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some
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people
cannot afford the cost of
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education
. It may have a
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negative
effect on
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some
children
as well
.
For instance
, In India, there are
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some
children who cannot go to school
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because
their parents have no
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enough
money to
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pay
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education
fees.
Thus
, it definitely enhances the illiterate rate to great extent.
Also
, it has a
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negative
effect on nation economy
indeed
.
Additionally
,
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people
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pay
a large amount of money in the form of various taxes like Income tax.
Therefore
, the regime should provide free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
to their citizens
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that parents can utilize money for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other purpose.

However
,
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some
argue that it should be free mere up to secondary level. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other major issues like pollution and employment
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so
the
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government
has
also
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need
to
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pay
intention on these matters.
Inclusively
, in colleges, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
salary to staff members, maintenance expenses which may be difficult without getting fee from learners.
In addition
, it declines the standard of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
which has more major consequences.
That is
why
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
gravitate towards this point of view.

After analyzing the aforesaid points, it has
been proven
that all schooling up to secondary should be complimentary.
Obviously
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the literacy rate of a nation.
However
, there should be a minimal charge on university such as tuition fees.
Ideally
, there should be a provision of scholarship for improvement in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay All education, primary, secondary and further education should be free to all people and paid for by the government. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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