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Some believe that is the responsibility of people to take care about the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss both views and state your opinion. v.1

Some believe that is the responsibility of people to take care about the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. v. 1
Environment is the connecting network of all beings. The beauty of it lies in the hands of caretakers. Climate paves the pathway for our past, present and future. When we say environment, it includes the natural resources like trees, animals, land and also water resources. However, maintaining of our aura now has become a primary concern. Government has a saying, 'For the people, By the people'. So when it cares for us, it should also take care of our surroundings and the steps to future. But due to the increase in population, the government fails to cope up the challenges of saving the surroundings. Though we have strict laws and policies for preserving environment not much people follow it precisely. Due to factors like population, pollution and deforestation, the value of saving our environment is lost. If government educates people through an awareness program, it may help. On the other hand, people became busy in their own daily routine and do not care much about habitat. A survey on the topic ' Caretakers of Envirnoment ' produced shocking results that a majority of people are less concerned about ambiance. For better future people need to protect it and pass the baton to the next generation. People should avoid putting the blame on each other rather start preserving along with others. Irrespective of people and government, we humans need to thank the environment and enrich it. People need to feel the importance and benefits we get from them. So our primary duty to the environment is by caring and protecting. Activities like afforestation, cleaning of lakes, preserving ponds should be encouraged.
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Environment
is the connecting network of all beings. The beauty of it lies in the hands of caretakers. Climate paves the pathway for our past, present and future. When we say
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, it includes the natural resources like trees, animals, land and
also
water resources.
However
, maintaining of our aura
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now
has become a primary concern.

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Government
has a saying, 'For the
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people
, By the
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people
'.
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So
when it cares for us, it should
also
take care of our surroundings and the steps to future.
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But
due to the increase in population, the
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government
fails to cope up the challenges of saving the surroundings. Though we have strict laws and policies for preserving
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environment
not much
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people
follow it
precisely
. Due to factors like population, pollution and deforestation, the value of saving our
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environment
is lost
. If
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government
educates
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people
through an awareness program, it may
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help
.

On the other hand
,
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people
became busy in their
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own
daily routine and do not care much about habitat. A survey on the topic
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'
Caretakers of
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Envirnoment
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'
produced shocking results that a majority of
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people
are less concerned about ambiance. For better future
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people
need to protect it and pass the baton to the
next
generation.
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People
should avoid putting the blame on each other
rather
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start
preserving along with others.

Irrespective of
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people
and
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government
, we humans need to thank the
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environment
and enrich it.
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People
need to feel the importance and benefits we
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get
from them.
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So
our primary duty to the
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environment
is by caring and protecting. Activities like afforestation, cleaning of lakes, preserving ponds should
be encouraged
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some believe that is the responsibility of people to take care about the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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