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Some believe that is is the responsibility of people to take care about the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss both views and state your opinion. v.1

Some believe that is is the responsibility of people to take care about the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. v. 1
There are two dimensions of the topic, to be clearer, two school of thoughts. A group of people assert that healthy environment is the responsibility of an individual; whereas the other group is of the view that responsibility lies with the Government as they have pivotal part to play in this regard. I shall discuss both perspectives in detail before reaching to a final verdict. To begin with, predominantly, green environment is the requirement of people living in, so major accountability should be upon people instead of the government. Individuals can keep the environment clean by taking small steps such as taking care of their personal hygiene or keep their homes clean. Green environment cannot be achieved through government regulations only, unless people realize the importance of healthy atmosphere. Individuals can play a vital role in this perspective, for instance, by using less plastics, appropriate fuel consumption or avoid activates that create noise pollution. On the contrary, some people believe that it is solely a government’s responsibility to take corrective and preventive measures in order to sustain clean environment. Government has the authority and laws that can be enforced through which pollution can be controlled. For example, government can ban plastic bags, it can impose law on rational fuel consumption. The steps that would be taken by government would have massive affects as compared to the small scale activities executed by some individuals. To recapitulate, healthy environment is essential for every individual and every step taken for its betterment would benefit everyone. I personally believe that government has the edge to bring change at a larger scale through big decisions.
There are two dimensions of the topic, to be clearer, two school of thoughts. A group of
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people
assert that healthy
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environment
is the responsibility of an
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individual
; whereas the other group is of the view that responsibility lies with the
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Government
as they have pivotal part to play in this regard. I shall discuss both perspectives in detail
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before
reaching to a final verdict.

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begin
with,
predominantly
, green
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environment
is the requirement of
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people
living in,
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so
major accountability should be upon
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people
instead
of the
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government
.
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Individuals
can
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keep
the
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environment
clean by taking
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small
steps such as taking care of their personal hygiene or
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keep
their homes clean. Green
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environment
cannot
be achieved
through
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government
regulations
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only
, unless
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people
realize the importance of healthy atmosphere.
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Individuals
can play a vital role in this perspective,
for instance
, by using less plastics, appropriate fuel consumption or avoid activates that create noise pollution.

On the contrary
,
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some
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people
believe that it is
solely
a
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government’s
responsibility to take corrective and preventive measures in order to sustain clean
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environment
.
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Government
has the authority and laws that can
be enforced
through which pollution can
be controlled
.
For example
,
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government
can ban plastic bags, it can impose law on rational fuel consumption. The steps that would
be taken
by
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government
would have massive affects as compared to the
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small
scale activities executed by
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some
individuals.

To recapitulate, healthy
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environment
is essential for every
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individual
and every step taken for its betterment would benefit everyone. I
personally
believe that
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government
has the edge to bring
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change
at a larger scale through
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big
decisions.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some believe that is is the responsibility of people to take care about the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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