Today people are living longer so they should have to work longer. Do you agree or disagree? v.1
Today people are living longer so they should have to work longer. v. 1
Nowadays, everything is changed, society, way of living and so many. People are living in several places, each has its allocations, some think that they are living longer so they must extend their work age, others disagree and feel it’s time to stop.
Living in a developed country assist people to enjoy their lives and feel comfortable and live more, that’s why number of people prefer to work longer. First, each day an invention is released, improvement in medical sectors, that help people to cure rapidly, stay fit and have more energy, that’s why they think the can work more and don’t retire early. Second, clean and healthy environment, play a main role to stay well, where people at old ages can work normally and concentrate on their jobs, without stress. For example, in Australia the government raised the age of retirement to 74, so they won’t live at the expenses of the state at young age. From my side I agree, if the country help its people and all facilities are available, why not to work longer.
On the other hand, some environment won’t assist people to work longer and encourage them to stay at their jobs, so they prefer to give up work earlier. First, several people believe that at a limit age they must stop working and relax, since they worked for a long time, need to enjoy and benefit from the remaining time. Second, some think that they should rest, and their children take care of them, or move to an infirmary, where thy can spend more time with others at their same age. For example, my grandfather retired at age of 65, and now is enjoying his life with his grandchildren and family. In my opinion I disagree, since someone can still give more to his society and share his experience to the younger.
In conclusion, as we can see that human think that they must work longer because people are living more, others believe the opposite and should step down. From my point of view, I agree that if we can still give more, and still full power and healthy we can work longer.
Nowadays, everything is
changed
, society, way of
living
and
so
many
.
People
are
living
in several places, each has its allocations,
some
think
that they are
living
longer
so
they
must
extend their
work
age
, others disagree and feel it’s
time
to
stop
.
Living in a
developed country
assist
people
to enjoy their
lives
and feel comfortable and
live
more, that’s why number of
people
prefer to
work
longer
.
First
, each day an invention
is released
, improvement in medical sectors, that
help
people
to cure
rapidly
, stay fit and have more energy, that’s why they
think
the can
work
more and don’t retire early. Second, clean and healthy environment, play a main role to stay well, where
people
at
old
ages
can
work
normally
and concentrate on their jobs, without
stress
.
For example
, in Australia the
government
raised the
age
of retirement to 74,
so
they won’t
live
at the expenses of the state at young
age
. From my side I
agree
, if the country
help
its
people
and all facilities are available, why not to
work
longer.
On the
other
hand,
some
environment won’t assist
people
to
work
longer
and encourage them to stay at their jobs,
so
they prefer to give up
work
earlier.
First
, several
people
believe that at a limit
age
they
must
stop
working and relax, since they worked for a long
time
, need to enjoy and benefit from the remaining
time
. Second,
some
think
that they should rest, and their children take care of them, or
move
to an infirmary, where thy can spend more
time
with others at their same
age
.
For example
, my grandfather retired at
age
of 65, and
now
is enjoying his life with his grandchildren and family. In my opinion I disagree, since someone can
still
give more to his society and share his experience to the younger.
In conclusion
, as we can
see
that human
think
that they
must
work
longer
because
people
are
living
more, others believe the opposite and should step down. From my point of view, I
agree
that if we can
still
give more, and
still
full power and healthy we can
work
longer
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes